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slim_shady
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 1
Roseville, California, Untied States

0 posted 2000-08-02 04:23 AM


I can feel her beauty when I'm not around, I am isolated by something that irratates me.  She's so soft and gentle, pretty as a blooming rose on a cold morning.  I desire her as much I desire life itself.  She throws her temptations at me, I want her so bad.  She's beautiful in every way, flawless in another.  I know my desire for her means nothing in her heart.




And I will take you in my arms and hold you right where you belong, till' the day my life is through...this I promise you...this I promise you.....

© Copyright 2000 Eminem - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2000-08-02 06:54 AM


Welcome to Passions Slim_Shady!  

Beautiful thoughts for your opening post!  I hope you enjoy your stay here!

Check your e-mail for a special message  

Best wishes,
/Kit McCallum

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
2 posted 2000-08-02 08:19 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!  I really enjoyed your first post.  I hope you like it here as much as I do.  Keep up the great work.

Chel


"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

3 posted 2000-08-02 10:23 AM


hey welcome to passions! great post...loved the simplicity yet truth spoken in each word. hope to read more of your stuff!

Salooma

Tara
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since 2000-02-21
Posts 76
Minnesota
4 posted 2000-08-02 12:03 PM


Nice first post.  Hope to see more from you soon.  Tara
Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

5 posted 2000-08-03 10:12 PM


Sweet and sad-some people are like that I guess.  Great poem and first post.  Keep writing
Bel

IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
Posts 723

6 posted 2000-08-03 10:21 PM


She's beautiful in every way
flawless in another
~ I loved this part

But it can't be true.  If her heart is so hard that even desire as strong as yours can not fet through then she is flawed.

Welcome to passions
look forward to more posts
IsGona


"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN"
~Hatebreed~

cutie2005
Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA
7 posted 2000-08-03 10:24 PM


Welcome to passions!! I hope you like it here, and feel you can share anything.. That was a good poem!! Hope to hear more..
  Love ya,
   cutie

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!

Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

8 posted 2000-08-03 11:12 PM


welcome! I realy hope you enjoy it here. I think you did a great job and i'm looking forward to reading more of your poems.
Lovely_Kris

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