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Gapgurly2001
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since 2000-08-01
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0 posted 2000-08-01 08:45 PM


As love passes by a certain somethings left behind.  A certain feeling left in side the heart a memory in the mind.  The times you held me close made me fell I was the one, you'd love me forever,  Little did I know you were almost done.  The things you said to me, that way you made me feel.  Made me think my fantisy was becoming real.  Why did I fall in love, why did I look into your eyes now all you've done to me is hurt me and fill me with lies.  All those lies you told to me well now I hope you see the things you did were wrong you had no right to hurt me.  So why'd I fall in love, and why did you fall out?  Is this what life is suppose to be about.  Why do I regret the times when we all we would do is fight why? when I know I was usualy right.  the tears I cry of sadness, I tried to pretend they don't appear I lied to myslef and say I don't want you near.  Why did you curse me with a love I needed so bad and then take it away, why? Just to make me sad.  Do you ever think about me now, because I think of you.  Of the future we could have had if you wouldn't do the things you do.  Are you happy now without me in your world are you happy not being able to say that I'm your girl.  When I see your face it makes me want to cry and when you look at me that way it hurts so bad inside.  I miss you so much but I'll never let you know even though I'd like to I just can't make it so.  I'll never confese my feelings afraid you'll get pleasure from my pain though the thought of holding you once more drives me insane. We were the couple you and me and we're over we're through, so why after all this do I still love you? They all tell me to forget it, it's over it's in the past. But how could something forever, just like that not last.  I cry thinking of you, I'll never understand why but when I said it I regret it, so why did I say goodbye?


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IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
Posts 723

1 posted 2000-08-01 09:28 PM



I'm so sorry.  I wish I could make you smile again.  I posted a poem very simular to this a couple a days ago.  infact it had the same title.  It felt good to share my feelings but the best advise I got from this forum was to not hide my thaughts be unheard by the one who really needs to hear them.  The next day I e-mailed my poem to the one who I was saying goodbye.  She hasn't responded yet but it feels SOOOO much better knowing that she knows much I miss her.
Good luck
IsGona

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
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2 posted 2000-08-02 06:24 AM


Welcome to Passions Gapgurly2001!  

You've expressed your emotions so well in this first post ... I hope to read more!

Best wishes and welcome aboard,
/Kit

PS ... it will be easier for the other readers to see your rhyme scheme if you hit "enter" or place "returns" at the end of each of your lines, it really is a lovely poem!  

I've formatted your words above to break where I thought your lines might end for an example ...
Keep up the great writing, and check your e-mail for a special message.

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            Goodbye

As love passes by a certain somethings left behind.  
A certain feeling left in side the heart a memory in the mind.  
The times you held me close made me fell I was the one,
you'd love me forever,  Little did I know you were almost done.  

The things you said to me, that way you made me feel.  
Made me think my fantisy was becoming real.  
Why did I fall in love, why did I look into your eyes
now all you've done to me is hurt me and fill me with lies.  

All those lies you told to me well now I hope you see
the things you did were wrong you had no right to hurt me.  
So why'd I fall in love, and why did you fall out? 
 Is this what life is suppose to be about.  

Why do I regret the times when we all we would do is fight
why? when I know I was usualy right.  
the tears I cry of sadness, I tried to pretend they don't appear
I lied to myslef and say I don't want you near.  

Why did you curse me with a love I needed so bad
and then take it away, why? Just to make me sad.  
Do you ever think about me now, because I think of you.  
Of the future we could have had if you wouldn't do the things you do.
  
Are you happy now without me in your world
are you happy not being able to say that I'm your girl.  
When I see your face it makes me want to cry
and when you look at me that way it hurts so bad inside.  

I miss you so much but I'll never let you know
even though I'd like to I just can't make it so. 
I'll never confese my feelings afraid you'll get pleasure from my pain
though the thought of holding you once more drives me insane.

We were the couple you and me and we're over we're through,
so why after all this do I still love you?
They all tell me to forget it, it's over it's in the past.
But how could something forever, just like that not last.  

I cry thinking of you, I'll never understand why
but when I said it I regret it, so why did I say goodbye?

/Gapgurly2001

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[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 08-02-2000).]

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
3 posted 2000-08-02 08:23 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!  I hope you like it here.  Great first post.  I really enjoyed reading it.  Keep up the good work.

Chel


"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
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4 posted 2000-08-02 10:13 AM


welcome to passions!!!
thanks for sharing such an experience with us
sorry to hear the sadness in it though
hope things get better for you and it will
we have exactly the same experience, though i'm the guy's point of view
need someone to talk to about it email me
hope to see more posts from you  

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