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jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair

0 posted 2000-08-01 11:05 AM


I know that your away and by so many miles
But that doesn't stop us from sharing smiles

Fun and laughter is always on my face
And I wish there wasn't so much space

Im not sure theres much we can do
And Im not sure I don't love you

My heart has dropped away from my me
And I feel empty without you baby

I wish I could go away and reappear
Alongside you and feel your silky hair

We can watch the sky for stars and the moon
And hope this moment doesn't end very soon

When we talk together I stare at your picture
And admire all your features in the mixture

They make me want to get up and run
And the sadness has only just begun

Bur for now a days all I can do is wait
For the day that we're tooken over by fate


- This goes out to Katie, a sweet girl I met on a cruise. Shes so special and means a lot to me but she lives in Texas and Im in Massachusetts...Only time will tell.

© Jeremy Raulinaits







© Copyright 2000 Jeremy Daniel Raulinaitis - All Rights Reserved
Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

1 posted 2000-08-01 11:10 AM


wow...what a sweet and beautiful post. you know if it's meant to be, everything will work out. good luck!

Salooma

LyricFetish
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
2 posted 2000-08-01 11:13 AM


A very sincere and meaningful poem. She obviously means a lot to you. Long distance relationships are unpredictable. It all depends on how commited the two people are. But hey, I live in Texas, so I could do some investigating for ya. (heh, heh .....little joke there) Okay, bye for now. Cool poem.

*~Meredith~*

If I were the sun,
You would be in shadow
And if I had a gun,
There'd be no tomorrow
*BNL

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-10-03 10:57 PM


Jeremy~This is so sweet...I never had the chance yet to work at a long distance relationship...(Does a vacation count)??? Well I am finding it hard to be so far away from the person that I love right now...He is on vacation in Mexico while I am here in Chicago...Many thousands of miles apart...But I hope things turn out for the best for you and her...And if it is really meant to be somehow yous will find each other again...

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Fearless_Angel
Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 57
Calgary, AB Canada
4 posted 2000-10-03 11:18 PM


Hey Jeremy:
    This is a beautiful poem. You really have a gift! Keep writing for everyone okies? And I wish you the best of luck in the future!
                     Lotsa Love,    
                              Angel_(^_~)

Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
5 posted 2000-10-04 03:24 PM


jeremy- I hope everything works out for you, and great writing here man
sweetstuff101
Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
OK, USA
6 posted 2000-10-05 07:39 PM


thats soo sweet, I hope it all works out well for you. Keep writing.

Luv,
   ~*~sweetstuff~*~

~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~


DancinQueen
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Senior Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
7 posted 2000-10-05 08:37 PM


Hey there   Been awhile since i talked to you. wonderful work as always. and boy dont i know about the long-distance krap. its the worst...its so hard knowing u're meant to be with someone forever but you cant be near them. sucks a big one, but oh well!! life goes on and you'll be fine, im sure things will turn out just the way you want them to   till then keep smiling and ou can talk to me if u need anything!!

Much LuvN ~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Caz
Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133
Concepción, Chile
8 posted 2000-10-05 08:43 PM


Great poem man, I hope you gave it to her. I can only say something that a very wise person told me... love will find its way. This girl sounds really special to you, and you should do everything for her. You should try to work it out. Maybe someday....

It's been raining since you left me.

Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
9 posted 2000-10-06 01:45 PM


Well dude, good luck to you and her. I do hope that love and fate slide along your way. May it end well.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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