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Chel
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

0 posted 2000-08-01 07:03 AM

Once I woke up
Once I went to school
Once I went home
Once I drove
Once I went for a walk
Once I had a friend
Once I had a family
Once I found love
Once I had a broken heart
Once I prayed to God
All this happened
Once upon a time

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

1 posted 2000-08-01 10:15 AM

sounds like once you had a fairy tale life chel...keep up the good work...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Salooma
Senior Member

since 2000-01-28

Posts 781

2 posted 2000-08-01 10:35 AM

I really liked this....kinda of a surprise at the end. I really likes this...makes life all a fariy tale. Great work!

Salooma

Lovely_Kris
Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

3 posted 2000-08-01 10:53 AM

I really like this poem. I think you did a wounderful job and keep up the great work.
Lovely_Kris

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

4 posted 2000-08-01 11:16 AM

Awesome! The repetition was very effective. ONCE I read you poem I knew you were a great writer. (give me a break here, it was kinda funny....

) Good job, girl.

*~Meredith~*

If I were the sun,
You would be in shadow
And if I had a gun,
There'd be no tomorrow
*BNL

Chel
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

5 posted 2000-08-01 02:31 PM

Thanx everyone for reading this poem. I wasn't really sure whether to post or not, and now I am glad that I did. Thanks again.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

6 posted 2000-08-02 07:26 AM

catchy...that's a pretty good word for this little guy. I do like it. ok...I'm gonna read another one of yer's now....sorry it took me so long to get to these.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

LoveAll
Member

since 2000-05-24

Posts 148
B'dale, USA

7 posted 2000-08-02 08:45 PM

I really like it...it is simple and true. Wonderful poem!

"Of all those arts in which the wise excel,
Nature's chief masterpiece is writing well."
~Essay on Poetry, John Sheffield

"Those who hope in the

sweetstuff101
Member

since 2000-07-27

Posts 375
OK, USA

8 posted 2000-08-02 11:02 PM

great poem!! i like it!! keep up the great work!!

Luv,
~*~sweetstuff~*~

~PeOpLe R sUpPoSeD 2 B LuVeD, aNd tHiNgS R SuPpOsEd 2 B UsEd; mOsT oF OuR PrObLeMs StEm FrOm rEaLiTy: tHiNgS R lUvEd AnD PeOpLe R uSeD~

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