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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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I havent seen her in what seems like ages. He put me through one of life's most difficult stages. She looked more beautiful then before. What is he trying to do, score??? Damn I havent got you off my mind. Wow, it seems like a really long time. I have missed her so much. I havent havent thought of him that much. I wish that we were still "one". Thank god its over and done. The way shes talking make me want to cry. I am trying to hurt him, I cannot tell a lie. I loved her more then words could say. I wish he would just go his own seperate way. To bad this relationship didnt last. I am happy to say he is my past. ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
I LOVE IT~!!! I love how you put it in that perspective. EXCELLENT poem..should be in the book* Keep writing ~!*DancinQueen*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
I so totally hate it when this happens. Good poem though, even though its biasedj/k. jason  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Great poem....I like the way you presented your ideas! Salooma "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
dancinqueen~~~thanks for the reply i am really glad you liked it. jacman~~~do you really hate it??? or you putting on a front..LOL thanks for your reply buddy... salooma~~~thanks you for your reply... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
I really like the way this poem showed different perspectives. I thought that was really cool. Great poem. It made me smile, though a little sad as well. Love, Crystal When a door closes, another door of oppurtunity opens. The only problem is that most of us are so busy looking at the closed door that we fail to see |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I love how you show both sides to this story. It's amazing how they can differ, isn't it? Keep up the good work!  "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
crystalina~~~thanks for your reply...i am really glad that i made you smile!!! lovebug~~~it is amazing how they both have a different perspective of each other huh???thanks for your reply... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a great poem as well as a great way to write. now i'll have to try it sometime. enjoyed the read very much keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jeremiah~~~where have you been??? its been so long since i last seen a post by you...well thanks for replying to my poem...it means alot to me... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Kittie Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103 |
Definitely something different, but nice to read from both perspectives. And a wonderful job doing so. Kittie |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
I enjoyed reading this poem, and feel that that is exactly the way both parties would think in a situation such as that. Nice job, and keep up the good work. |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Erin, thanx for the response to my poem. I really enjoyed this poem. I totally got this poem. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
the_driven~~~thanks for the reply...this is the way that i think the guy would think... chel~~~thanks for the reply...i only reply to your poems because you write really good... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This is a very nice poem. Although this poem is a little judgemental of men I can see how these situations can be true. Just don't be one to ever think she has men figured out cause all men are diferent. Keep up the good work. Jason |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jason~~~im not saying how all guys are like this...im putting it from my point of view from one of the guys that i fell in love with... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Well, I hope the ex grlfrnd of mine that I've been trying to begin a new friendship with isn't thinking stuff like this. I'm not trying to get back with her...I just really miss having her in my life. Anywho...great idea and wonderful way to put that great idea. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jeremy~~~thanks for replying to my poem...i doubt shes thinking this...its just something that came to my head...cuz i talked to an ex of mine after 4 months of not saying anything to him... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
wow great poem! that is kinda sad tho. but i still liked it . Well keep up the great work!Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~¤*¤~iF yOu LuV sOmEoNe, PuT ThEiR nAmE iN a CiRcLe, iNsTeAd Of A hEaRt, BcUz HeArTz CaN bReAk, BuT CiRcLeZ gO oN 4eVeR~¤*¤~ |
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Misty Blue Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44 |
Erin, If you only knew how much I feel you right now. I would have never thought of that concept displayed in this poem. Stay Tru ( Sorry I haven't been around for a while but I am back and ready to write) |
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cutie2005 Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 148Bennett, Colorado USA |
This was really good, I loved it, and so true too..!!! Thanks for sharing Love ya, cutie If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them! |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
I think your poem is EXCELLENT. I think you did a wounderful job on this poem. I hope to read more of your poems and keep up the great job. Lovely_Kris |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
thank you all for your replies!!! i really appreciate them... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
Hey great poem I liked the way you let everything out into perspective keep it up |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
AWESOME POEM, that was so great, I loved it, keep on writing... |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
thanks truluv and sweetpoet for replying to my poem... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
hey GREAT poem!! i really agree with what you are tring ot say....and i really like you signiture!!! thats always true..... and i hope life treats you good!!!love, Janette Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care! |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
hey GREAT poem!! i really agree with what you are tring ot say....and i really like you signiture!!! thats always true..... and i hope life treats you good!!!love, Janette Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
chrislover~~~thanks for the reply...this was someone in my past...i got over him and i am now with the sweetest guy... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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