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Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC

0 posted 2000-07-31 11:55 PM


As the song starts
she gets up to dance,
She is the mistress of
this spicy Brazillian rythm.
While everybody else,
those who just danced
the salsa and the merengue,
seem incapacitated by it,

She was born for this rythm.
Her beautiful flesh quivers in this
fast paced dance.
That slender body of hers,
the way she moves,
she steals my heart.

When I get up to join her,
A prison braclet stings me.
It's you.
A reminder of of who we are,
and what we have.

© Copyright 2000 Jose Marti - All Rights Reserved
Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
1 posted 2000-08-01 07:05 AM


Great poem.  Keep up the good work.  Good luck with this girl.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

2 posted 2000-08-01 11:21 AM


this is a great poem....i love the details in the first too stanzas, but let me get this straight. you can't dance with the samba girl cause you're involved with someone else? and it seems like you care a lot for her...right? great poem anyways!

Salooma

Le Capitan de L'Amour
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since 2000-07-15
Posts 60

3 posted 2000-08-01 11:54 PM


wow this is a nice poem Jose. Oh-la-la.
Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
4 posted 2000-08-02 11:52 PM


thanks to the three of you for reading (at least someone read my poem)
~Salooma: that's right, although we don't go out anymore.

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

5 posted 2000-08-03 02:08 PM


Wow that was good.  All of your poems are good...you have a lot of talent.  I'm sure other people read your poems, they just might not reply.  Keep it up
Bel

Tara
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since 2000-02-21
Posts 76
Minnesota
6 posted 2000-08-03 02:53 PM


Wow....I loved the way you described everything so well.  Your poem was awesome...Tara
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