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littleC
Junior Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 21


0 posted 2000-07-31 06:59 PM


Big Brother

With a joke that you crack
And a pat on the back
You put a smile where once
There were tears.
With a sincere, "You can do it!"
And a, "Sis keep it real."
For an instant you push back my fears.
With a humorous trick
You perform very quick;
A laugh, funny face, and a smile,
You help me to see
Hou sweet life could be
Even though just for a while.


I wrote this for my older brother, who has always been my best friend.   


littleC

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Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

1 posted 2000-07-31 09:28 PM


Good poem.  It was very sweet!  It's so nice that you have such a good relationship with your brother.  Keep writing
Bel

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-08-01 12:08 PM


first of all welcome to passions...this is the first poem that i have read by you...its really cool that you and your brother have a good relationship...keep up the good work...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
3 posted 2000-08-01 07:21 AM


Hey there, that's a great poem, and I am glad to hear that you have such a close relationship with your brother.  I have the same relationship with my sister.  Well keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Jacman
Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
4 posted 2000-08-01 09:09 AM


Hey that's great! I don't know where I would be if it weren't for my sisters.  Keep them coming.

Jason

Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear...
-Metallica-

Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

5 posted 2000-08-01 10:03 AM


Great poem and a great ryhme. Seems like your brother is lucky to have ya!

Salooma

Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
6 posted 2000-08-01 10:04 AM


Oh, I enjoyed this littleC!  What a wonderful relationship you must have with your brother. You have a lovely rhythm and flow to this poem ... great writing!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

littleC
Junior Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 21

7 posted 2000-08-01 10:22 AM


Thanks, everyone, for the kind comments.



littleC

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