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Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

0 posted 2000-07-31 01:42 PM


I sit here at my desk
Trying to write a poem
I look to see what's happened
I have left a broken heart
I can see it in your eyes
You were hurt
I am sorry
Somehow I think I should stop
Writing about love
In my heart I know the words
The story is always the same
I am sorry
I can only hope that you find someone better to fill the hole in your heart
I just wasn't ready
You saw it coming and
I am sorry


"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

© Copyright 2000 Michelle Y. Plocinik - All Rights Reserved
DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
1 posted 2000-07-31 02:47 PM


This is such a wonderful poem. I know exactly how you feel. Things will get better, i promise!till then..

~!*DancinQueen*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

2 posted 2000-07-31 03:12 PM


Hi! I think you wrote a wounderful poem. I realy like this. Keep up the great work and i hope to read more.
Lovely_Kris

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-07-31 04:04 PM


chel~~~this is a really good poem...but you shouldnt be sorry...you cant promise someone that you wont break their heart...mostly when your not ready for it...keep up the good work...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Kittie
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since 2000-07-08
Posts 103

4 posted 2000-07-31 04:33 PM


This is very sweet and very understandable to those who have been through the same situation. Keep writing, never give up.
Kittie



katy
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since 2000-07-31
Posts 4

5 posted 2000-07-31 06:06 PM


this poem is really great poem. it would be better for you to say you are sorry though for whatever happened than to just let it be. that shows real character and i respect you for that...i really love reading your stuff keep them coming!


~*~*katy*~*~

Tara
Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76
Minnesota
6 posted 2000-07-31 06:56 PM


All i have to say is wow.  i got goose bumps when i read this.  have you ever read someone else's poem and realized that exact thing happened to you?   that just scares me.  i really like the way you start off, explaining that you are trying to write a poem, instead of just starting after that.  great work.  Tara
TrueLUV
Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.
7 posted 2000-07-31 08:56 PM


Hey great poem, and don't feel so bad you weren't ready and you told him the way it had to be believe me he understands now, but great poem don't feel bad   keep writing its beautiful
Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

8 posted 2000-07-31 09:40 PM


Very good poem.  Things should get better, everything happens for a reason.  Keep your chin up and keep writing
Bel

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
9 posted 2000-07-31 11:06 PM


chel, don't worry about it too much. I'm sure that this guy is probably already over it, and feeling better. We guys heal pretty quickly.

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
10 posted 2000-07-31 11:07 PM


chel, don't worry about it too much. I'm sure that this guy is probably already over it, and feeling better. We guys heal pretty quickly.

Isabelle
Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana
11 posted 2000-07-31 11:26 PM


I have to agree with Erin. You did do a good job at expressing your feelings though. Keep up the work.

Jeanna  

"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~



Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
12 posted 2000-08-01 06:55 AM


I want to thank everyone for reading, and responding to my poem.  I love writing, and can only hope that you enjoy reading it.  Well THANX again.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

13 posted 2000-08-01 11:27 AM


wonderful and heartfelt.....love doesn't come easy, hopefully you're friend will understand. great poem!

salooma

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
14 posted 2000-08-02 07:29 AM


Chel, of course I enjoy reading your writing...I'm really sorry I haven't been getting around to it, but my life is kinda dragging me down...or in my own head or something...Anywho, please just keep doing whatever makes you happy at the moment.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

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