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Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
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0 posted 2000-07-29 10:06 PM


The stars are bright
The stars are small
High in the sky
As I look up
The sky is dark
The air is cool
The wind blows
The flowers bloom
The smell of grass
The moon is bright
The moon is peacful
As I stare at the sky
I can see a shooting star go by
Lovely_Kris






[This message has been edited by Lovely_Kris (edited 07-30-2000).]

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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-07-30 12:43 PM


sounds like you like stars...i like them too but only when i am able to see them...and i only seen a shooting star once...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
2 posted 2000-07-30 12:43 PM


Hello there, great poem.  Keep up the good work.  There were some nice images in this poem.

Chel


"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
3 posted 2000-07-30 04:05 PM


I enjoyed this very much! It's like being in a dream. Kind of 'star-dusty'. Great job!

If I could read your mind,
What would you say?
Would it take my breath away?
*Human

Kittie
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since 2000-07-08
Posts 103

4 posted 2000-07-30 04:13 PM


Very beautiful and peaceful.  Your poetry is growing always, and will continue to do so, don't ever give up; keep reaching for the stars.
Kittie



TearsOfPearls
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa
5 posted 2000-07-30 04:41 PM


This is a lovely poem Kris, I like it alot. Keep up the good writing.  

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

6 posted 2000-07-30 07:28 PM


Thank you all for reading my poems. I hope you keep enjoying my poems and keep reading them. Thanks again.
Lovely_Kris

DancinQueen
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7 posted 2000-07-30 09:11 PM


Thats a beautiful poem. I like stars, too =) Keep up the great work*

~!*DancinQueen*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

8 posted 2000-07-31 01:02 PM


Thanks daninqueeen for reading my poem. I would also like to say thanks to everyone else who replyed to me poem. Thanks again.
Lovely_Kris

Alwye
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In the space between moments
9 posted 2000-07-31 11:25 PM


A simple and very beautiful vision you've shown us here.  Exellent work!  

*Krista Knutson*

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."
-Barbara DeAngelis

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