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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Old lady Daniela a young couple mocked her an old black mulatta "Vamos a ver"* I heard her mutter, "vamos a ver." I saw her anoint a conch shell. I saw her leave it at their door. That night, the storm clouds drew giant bolts flew down from the blackness above. Out flew her hair, out fell his teeth Flames consumed their house, yet they survived. Just barely. Old lady Daniela. Her sister became ill. She began to cough blood "I'm going to die" she said "Vamos a ver," Daniela told her, "vamos a ver." I saw Daniela anoint a conch shell I saw Daniela give it to her. Lightning struck her house, She began to heal, her illness faded, and she lived on, Just barely. Old lady Daniela I side swiped her on the freeway Just yesterday. I heard her grumble "Vamos a ver," she told me "vamos a ver." So I wonder now, Old lady Daniela, When will the the lightning strike, What will become of me? |
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FoxyGirl Junior Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 17 |
WOW...Great poem. Very descriptive.i enjoyed it. Keep up the great work and hope to read more. Jenn |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Very intersting poem. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
just like chel said very intresting...i didnt understand a little bit but it was well written...keep up the good work... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Thank you all for responding, Erin~ Vamos a ver means "we'll see," an old Cuban experession preceding some sort of drastic action. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Jose~I loved this poem! very descriptive! "vamos a ver" this totally puts it all together. I think it is great. Keep it up~Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ p.s. I was wondering if maybe you could e-mail me your "Jerry Springer" poem, I didn't get to read it before it was deleted. My e-mail address is StarPryncess17@hotmail.com  thanks!! *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I'm glad that you liked my poem Jessica. I sent you a copy of my other poem "Am I gonna be on Jerry Springer. I hope you enjoy it. If anybody else out there didn't get a chance wants to see it, just ask. |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
Interesting poem. I especially like the twist ending you put on there at the end. Keep up the good writing. |
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Le Capitan de L'Amour Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60 |
Jose, your poetry is good. you should write more of it. I almost never see your work around. |
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