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Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

0 posted 2000-07-28 08:36 AM


It was a whole filled with love
It seems I fell in and out of love
Pieces of my heart quickly faded away
I have seen couples my entire life
I said I want that
When I have it I throw it out
My heart is no longer stable
Looking for something to lean on
It turns to you
You hurt me
I turn away
My heart was broken
What do you have now
Except pieces to my heart


"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

© Copyright 2000 Michelle Y. Plocinik - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
1 posted 2000-07-28 08:39 AM


Ouch, sorrow and angst...

well written poem from the heart, Chel...

regards,
sudhir

Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

2 posted 2000-07-28 10:55 AM


Nice job. Keep up the great work and hope to read more.
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-07-28 11:15 AM


chel i am really sorry to hear that this guy did this to you...my heart goes out to you...one day you will find someone who wont break your heart...keep up the good work...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Ethan Halo
Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
4 posted 2000-07-28 01:07 PM


beautifully composed! you write free verse so well.
the part i liked best:
"I have seen couples my entire life
I said I want that"
good work!

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

TrueLUV
Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.
5 posted 2000-07-28 01:26 PM


Great poem Iam sorry to hear that the guy treated you so bad I hope you find another love   keep on writing its beautiful
Jacman
Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
6 posted 2000-07-28 01:30 PM


Chel, your heart is beautiful.  I feel your pain, and hope that the pieces come back togethor for you.  Keep the chin up and life, well it will just keep going on.  Might as well do what we can to enjoy the ride.

jason

Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear...
-Metallica-

sherm
Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 94
Evansville,IN
7 posted 2000-07-28 05:20 PM


that was a great poem   im sorry you got hurt like that but i hope you can get over it soon and feel better    and keep writing of course   =)
Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
8 posted 2000-07-28 06:02 PM


First of all I want to thank everyone who has read the poem or is about to read it.  I am glad that I have touched people with all of my poems.

Sudir~ Thanx for the reply

Lovely_Kris~ I am glad to see that you enjoyed this

Erin~ Thanx for the support

Ethan_Halo~ I am glad that you took time to read my poem, I enjoy your work so much, I only hope you do the same for mine.

TrueLUV~ I only hope that there is someone for everyone out there

Jacman~ I am sorry that you have experienced the same thing.  I hope the pain goes away soon.

Sherm~ I was happy to hear that you enjoyed this piece.

Everyone thanx again for reading my poetry.  I hope everyone enjoyed reading it as I did writing it.  Everyone keep your heads up.

Luv always,
Chel


"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

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