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Martini
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since 2000-07-11
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Toronto, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2000-07-27 02:23 PM



She drove her car
the path she took day after day
and wondered how to tell him,
everything would change.
She knew he'd be shocked
and probably a little scared,
she knew this could end it
and brign such pain her way.

The driveway came too soon
The engine died too quick
The door was too close
He answered too fast.

His mood looked so good
It was all about to change,
just like everything else in their lives
as soon as she told him.

He could tell by her face
that something was not quite right,
he could tell she had been crying
by the redeness in her beautiful green eyes.

He let her inside
and told her no one was home
that she could tell him anything
just let him in.

She had run through the words
a million times in her head,
she had known just what to say
but nothing came out now.

Finally she told him
the very thing she had always dread,
but first she told him she loved him
and he responded with the same.

He looked at her with a look
that she couldn't ever describe again,
a mixture of fear, and uncertainty
of not knowing how this would ever end

they were too young to be dealing with this
they were too young for this change,
the were too young to have a child
for they were children themselves.

He reached out to hold
unsure what to say
they held on to one another
and each said a silent prayer.

Hers were of him
not leaving her with this alone,
His quite different
asking for the strength to be a man.

They couldn't let go
for the fear of reality hitting,
scared of what they had done
petrified of what they would have to do.

And they finally let go
not of each other,
but of the life they had known
for it was time to become adults.




"In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On"
~Robert Frost

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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
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1 posted 2000-07-27 02:52 PM


wow this is a good poem...would it have anything to do with the girl getting pregnant??? cuz thats the only thing that i can think of at this point on what the news would be...

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Martini
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 308
Toronto, Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-07-27 02:56 PM


Erin
thanks so much
and yes it does have to do with the girl getting pregnant....
a tough time...
thanks for stopping by and reading

"In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On"
~Robert Frost

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
3 posted 2000-07-27 03:07 PM


Martini,
This is a great poem and the last line keeps ringing back...

excellent...

regards,
sudhir

Martini
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 308
Toronto, Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-07-27 03:08 PM


sudhir
thank you
becoming an adult is not an easy task we all are faced with!!

I'm glad you enjoyed  

Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
5 posted 2000-07-27 03:21 PM


great, great poem. you kept the news a mystery for a good length of the poem. i liked that. and the theme was beautiful. not about giving up or running away, but facing it together. i also like the stanza about their prayers.
excellent work indeed. as always i am impressed.

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

Martini
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 308
Toronto, Ontario, Canada
6 posted 2000-07-27 03:33 PM


well ethan
your praise always brighten my day!!

thank you so much!!  

Crystalina123
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since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

7 posted 2000-07-27 03:48 PM


I think this is a wonderfuk poem. You described the aunguish one goes through in this situation beautifully. Makes me wonder how autobiographical this poem is . . . any beautiful poem and I must say if these people are real then my prayers are with them.

Crystal

When a door closes, another door of oppurtunity opens. The only problem is that most of us are so busy looking at the closed door that we fail to see

Gregory
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 22
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, United States
8 posted 2000-07-27 09:45 PM


That was a great poem/story Martini...I enjoyed reading it! Good Luck and continue writing!  Thanx for reading mine!

Creed Rules!!!!!

Wicced_Witch
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since 2000-02-06
Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA
9 posted 2000-07-27 11:03 PM


Martini, I loved this poem, especially the way you kept the new a secret for so long.  I am in that situation right now and I think you caught the feeling of it very well.  Keep up the good work.

Stephanie

Martini
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 308
Toronto, Ontario, Canada
10 posted 2000-07-28 08:33 AM


Chrystal,
thanks for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed the poem!!     

Gregory,
thank you so much for reading and enjoying my poem.  And creed does Rules!!!  

Stephanie,
I hope everything works out ok in your situation, just remember that no matter how hard and horrible it may seem one day that does go away very quickly!!  Best of luck, thanks for reading

"In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On"
~Robert Frost

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
11 posted 2000-07-28 08:59 AM


Great poem.  I enjoyed it very much.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

TrueLUV
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since 2000-07-19
Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.
12 posted 2000-07-28 10:05 AM


The poem was great   I had a similar experience wiht a girl I thouhg my life was ending and I was going to be a young father, but everything is alright now she was ok.  I want to thank you for putting into words what I wanted to express because I tried to and I put up a poem, but it was brought down due to adult content in the forums so I thank you and hope to read more of your work  
Martini
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Toronto, Ontario, Canada
13 posted 2000-07-28 10:10 AM


Chel
thanks so much

Martini
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Toronto, Ontario, Canada
14 posted 2000-07-28 10:15 AM


TrueLuv
I'm glad you felt a connection with this poem.
It's tough when you think your life is about to change and really it's all your own fault realy.
I'm glad to hear everything worked out ok in your situation, but even if it hadn't and you had become a young father your life would not have ended it would have just changed, probably become a little harder with a lot more responsiblity but it wouldn't have ended.  You can still have a life after you've had a child it just becomes a little more difficult...

I'm glad everything worked out in your life.



"In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On"
~Robert Frost

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