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The One Thing Missing
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The One Thing Missing |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
One of the many gifts that i enjoy, is the great one called Life, of which i'm blessed to have. But after thinking about it long enough, i feel that there's something missing... I see my life as a picture. Looks complete to anyone else who gazes upon it. Seems complete enough. But to the artist, something isnt quite right. The smallest detail it is, but enough to drive me mad. For without this tiny detail, the picture seems somewhat unfinished.... Worthless. As hard as i try to enjoy life, the more it seems that its incomplete in someway. Endless emerald grases, Waters glowing blue with life, People of all shapes, and sizes, and colors. All of the color, and all the beauty. but it seems to me like its incomplete in some way, that i could enjoy it a little more if i just had something else. But What? A walk outside told me all i needed to know. I stepped into the world and saw the people, but it was strange.... It seemed like they were all in pairs! A girl for each boy. A boy for eah girl. Everything in pairs... I saw all this- Then i saw myself... One person. No pair. Alone. And then i realized what i needed, or wanted, to enjoy life a little more, And that was someone to enjoy it with. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
one day you will find that one missing thing...and you know what its gonna be one of the best experiences of all...its gonna be something for the rest of your life you will never forget... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredibly beautiful Driven! I loved your thoughts in this. As a painter, I know too well, the feeling you've described ... and you wove it so wonderfully into your theme. With a heart as genuine as yours, your match will find "you" when you least expect it.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Beautiful poem. I am sure you will find that someone soon enough, just keep your head up. Good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was incredible! it was well written, and full of sentiment. Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~People R supposed 2 B luved, and things R supposed 2 B used; most of our problems stem from realiTy: Things R luved and People R used~ |
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Le Capitan de L'Amour Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60 |
very nice poem Barry. I hope you find somebody soon. If not soon, then someday. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Barry, the poem was well writen, it's a frustration that a lot of us feel. I hope that you find somebody soon |
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FoxyGirl Junior Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 17 |
Hey, very nice poem. I enjoyed reading it alot. I hope u will find someone that loves u very much soon. keep up the great work. hope to see more poems soon. Jenn |
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Euclid the Kid Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 51Eugene,Oregon |
Great Poem Driven, witha tremendous built up to your point. Life is meant to be lived but also shared--I hope you find that special one for yours. Dean |
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