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Le Capitan de L'Amour
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0 posted 2000-07-25 06:30 PM


Night by night i have this dream that i cant get rid of is a nightmare which continues one after another and which doesnt stop.

The first one I dream that you get murdered and you are right beside me and when I wake up i find the murderer killing you, and I cant do nothing about it.

The second we are in the beach and a shark comes and eat you, I drop to the sand screaming to the sky and wake up.

The third we are in a store and there is a robery and they take you and when I come with the money they had already killed you, I kill my self and wake again, it was over,but when it was our relationship also was, so from that moment on I cry and cry for I was been I fool suffering for you.

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thebeautybrat
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since 2000-03-30
Posts 114
Florida
1 posted 2000-07-25 08:33 PM


touching poem!! i liked it a lot!! while i was reading your poem it reminded me a lot of the poems in the dark passions #2!! if you posted this there they would love it!!

It is better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all.

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
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~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-07-26 05:28 PM


wow!!! what kind of dreams you have...i have had some messed up dreams too...where my boyfriend kicked me out of his car in a horrible neighborhood...cuz we got into an argument...it kinda scared me though...but i know it would never happen...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

3 posted 2000-07-27 11:22 AM


Wow!  Very good....I'm impressed.  You aren't the only one with really messed up dreams....keep up the writing!
Bel

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
4 posted 2000-07-28 10:39 AM


Chris, nice poem.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

FoxyGirl
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since 2000-07-28
Posts 17

5 posted 2000-07-28 11:53 AM


hey, that was a great poem. We all have had horrible dreams before. Or atleast I have. Keep up the great work and I hope your nightmares become good dreams.
                     Jenn

Le Capitan de L'Amour
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since 2000-07-15
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6 posted 2000-07-28 02:40 PM


Hey thank you guys I will like to hear from you all more of ten please send your comments to me  bye
Le mecs

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
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washing DC
7 posted 2000-08-07 08:39 PM


Wow, great poem Chris, you are good at this.
Isabelle
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since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana
8 posted 2000-08-07 10:42 PM


This is different but i like it. I always believe that the dreams that i have a meaning. Like you dreaming of the girl getting hurt or killed is like a sign that your relationship with her was gonna be no longer..get my drift. Well sorry for the bad and weird dream. Keep up the good work though.

Luv,
Jeanna  

"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~


thug-a-licious
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since 2000-08-08
Posts 27

9 posted 2000-08-08 01:27 PM


This poem was really different but in a good way! Sounds like u were really in love! I would love to see more of your poems they are really good! I'm glad to know i'm not the only one who has strange dreams!
Alexis

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

10 posted 2000-08-09 01:49 AM


Great post...wonderful style!
You know what's strange...I miss having dreams...even nightmares, I haven't had one for so long, but awesome topic...been on all our minds  

salooma

Ana
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since 2000-05-15
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iLLINOIs
11 posted 2000-08-09 11:11 AM


Great poem Capitan! It's very unique.

**ana**

Silent soul
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since 2000-06-10
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tx,usa
12 posted 2000-08-09 03:52 PM


hey I liked that different way of writing very good indeed....and dont worry I have dreams actually nightmares that are similar...anyways good poem!

peace <3
Silent
Life is to short to be pissed off all the time



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