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Le Capitan de L'Amour
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since 2000-07-15
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0 posted 2000-07-25 06:18 PM


Women, ooh la la are my addiction there beauty in display day by day seen them pass giving me no attention, but i dont mind because my addiction to them is much more than a child without its candy, to a planet with out life.

But oh my you all are my contraddiction because of the argue and argue that goes between us thats why pleople say that men are from Mars and women are from Venus, but I still dont mind because you are my best addiction.


But at the end of my our would like to have you beside me for you all are my addiction and my desire.

© Copyright 2000 Le Capitan de L'Amour - All Rights Reserved
thebeautybrat
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since 2000-03-30
Posts 114
Florida
1 posted 2000-07-25 08:46 PM


i liked this a lot!! very creative!!

It is better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all.

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-07-26 03:17 AM


lol this put a smile on my face...i used to have an addiction like that...only thing different was i was addicted to guys...until i met my boyfriend...keep up the good work...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Jacman
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since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
3 posted 2000-07-26 10:31 AM


Being that this is the first I've read of yours, I will say welcome to passions.  I definitely share the same addiction.  But I hope that it doesn't put me in a 12 step program.hahaha stupid joke.  Keep up the writing.

Jason

Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear...
-Metallica-

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
4 posted 2000-07-26 12:23 PM


Hey there, I don't know you, but it seems that you know me.  Keep up the good work, though.

Chel


"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

amazon_lover
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
5 posted 2000-07-26 03:04 PM


Its undeniable. Everyone has an attraction for the opposite sex. God created that feeling and its normal until you exceed it in wierd proprtions.good work. take care and don't fall into STM.

Sincerely
A_L

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
6 posted 2000-08-07 08:57 PM


Hey there that is a nice poem and I want to say that "this is the best of your work.bye chris!
Isabelle
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since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana
7 posted 2000-08-07 10:16 PM


This poem made me smile. I think u did a very good job writing this. Keep it up =)

Jeanna  


"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~


Le Capitan de L'Amour
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since 2000-07-15
Posts 60

8 posted 2000-08-11 02:58 PM


thanks to all of you that have liked my poem I hope I get more replys
thank you

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
9 posted 2000-08-11 05:24 PM


And more replies you shall get...this was a sweet poem! lol I too have this problem...I'm addicted to boys. damn! I hope they have some sort of rehab for it. hehe. Keep it up! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Why is it that love always starts with a hug, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear?~*~

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
10 posted 2000-08-11 11:08 PM


I liked your poem. You had some great lines but I am a fan of the old fashioned verse with line breaks. I could show you what I mean if your interested. You can contact me via e-mail if you are interested.  



When you are old and grey and full of sleep,
And nodding by the fire, take down this book,
And slowly read, and dream of the soft look
Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep;

How many loved your moments of glad grace,
And loved your beauty with love false or true,
But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you,
And loved the sorrows of your changing face...

William Butler Yeats

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