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heartbroken
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 9


0 posted 2000-07-25 12:26 PM


The first day I saw you I knew you were the one.
The more I get to know you , the more I enjoy
being with you.When I'm with you I can't take my eyes off you, but when I'm not with you, I can't stop thinking about you. As time goes on, my love and happiness grows within. When I am with you all my pain seems to fade away. I hope one day our feelings will be true because I just want to be with you.

© Copyright 2000 heartbroken - All Rights Reserved
TrueLUV
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since 2000-07-19
Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.
1 posted 2000-07-25 02:10 PM


Really a great poem I hope that the guy feels the same way and you should tell him how you feel becauae if you dont then you'll never know whatever it is that you feel if its true tell him how you feel inside great poem hope to read more stuff  
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-07-25 07:26 PM


Welcome to Passions Heartbroken!

A wonderful first post ... straight from the heart!
Hope to read more from you!

Best wishes,
/Kit


[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 07-25-2000).]

thebeautybrat
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since 2000-03-30
Posts 114
Florida
3 posted 2000-07-25 08:09 PM


i loved this poem!! i'm into the love poems!! i write a lot about my experiences in love and i like to hear what others think about it!! i hope to read more of your poems after this!!

It is better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all.

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-07-26 02:57 AM


welcome to passions!!! i hope that you enjoy it here...very nice poem...good luck with whoever this is for...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Gregory
Junior Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 22
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, United States
5 posted 2000-07-26 12:26 PM


Hey heartbroken, That poem was really a great one.  I really enjoyed reading it and I felt the words you wrote!  Keep up the good work!  
heartbroken
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 9

6 posted 2000-10-04 11:09 AM


Thanks everyone for the replys! It means alot that you took time out to reply to my poem.
StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
7 posted 2000-10-04 11:50 AM


A wonderful first post HeartBroken, Welcome to our little family. I do hope you enjoy your stay here. Keep writing, I can't wait to see more.
Love always
~*~Jessica~*~


~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
8 posted 2000-10-04 03:25 PM


This poem was written in a simple style like the other one you wrote. I can see you like to write things how they are without this flowery style and form. It's cool.
keep it up!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
9 posted 2000-10-05 10:23 AM


Welcome to Passions!!! I hope you'd find this place as a learning experience as well as a sharing/teaching experience too.  

Well written first post Heartbroken, you described really well your want for this special person.  keep up the good work. thanks for sharing this poem.  keep sharing  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


heartbroken
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 9

10 posted 2000-10-06 11:17 AM


Thanks for the replys! i will be writing more soon!
CrazyPrincessAngelDevil
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 36
Fitchburg, Ma, Usa
11 posted 2000-10-07 09:21 AM


good poem I liked it alot    
             ~*~Min~*~

curlygurly
Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276
USA
12 posted 2000-10-07 02:56 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
This was an excellent poem and i know exactly what you mean by it! great first poem!  
Curlz


"i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky"
enrique iglesias


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