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Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
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washing DC

0 posted 2000-07-22 10:39 PM


On the day I was set free,

I went searching for you.

You who had called my name

You who had expressed your desire,

called to me.


I wanted to

rush into rush into your arms,

to feel your warmth,

and I could not.


I found myself entangled,

and chained down,

hopelessly I watched you cry,

as you realized that you

couldn't hold me in your embrace


We reached for eachother

but my chains held fast

to my mortal limbs.


I was finally set free,

so I went in search of you…

and you to my amazment…

Gone.


Absoulutly,

without a trace

as if you had been a ghost,

that desolved into tears,

and was never seen again.

© Copyright 2000 Jose Marti - All Rights Reserved
Alwye
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In the space between moments
1 posted 2000-07-23 10:50 PM


Such sorrow...but written extremely well.  Keep up the great work!  

*Krista Knutson*

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."
-Barbara DeAngelis

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
2 posted 2000-07-24 09:45 AM


Very emotional poem.  I am sure that I am the last person you want to hear from.  Just keep your head up.  I liked the poem, though, keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 152
UK
3 posted 2000-07-24 01:55 PM


Excellent, full of grief...and pain..

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2007-12-03 08:26 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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