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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
The person that I am writing this for knows who she is. Should she venture into this little place of ours then she can know that this was for her. Never Never was what I had said. I was so sure. Life has a way of changing you. In ways never imagined. You took me by complete surprise. And I never want to let that go. My soul, broken and bleeding, you found lovely. I've never felt a kiss like yours. My body shakes at the mere revelation. Like a child with a little puppy. Giddy, happy, and free. These clumsily uttered words cannot describe the look I saw in your eyes. And how it burns right through me. I hated to leave. and sever our touch. But in my mind you are here. And I never left you there alone. On and away to live my life. I don't want to miss you. Even though we can't be togethor, Your here wherever I go. And I'll never be so sure again. Jason A Carmen |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Once again - a brilliant poem from you. This girl is very special. I hope that you can find her again one day. Your poems (and I know I've said this before) have so much emotion. I love them, it's hard to describe what poetry does to me, but I know if a poem is good (to my standards) and yours definately is good. I hope that you continue to write and I hope that you share all your works with us here! If not, then please feel free to send me some of your work, I think it's brilliant!! Love Always, Shell. Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me ~Beautiful~ ~Creed~ |
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sherm Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 94Evansville,IN |
I love this poem man. That girl must be really special. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I know who this is about...uh...I think...I'd better not be wrong or I'll feel pretty freakin' stupid. I don't think I read this one....but I like it. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Jason, my dear, my little heart goes out to you hun!! I think everyone knows what it's like to be hurt...I know I do! I'm sorry about this. I'm sure this girl is very special and very dear to your heart. Jason, you are a great guy with an awesone personality and I can't begin to tell you how much you deserve in a girl...I'll tell you this much though, if we weren't so damn far away, I'd be glad to date ya! hehehe. seriously though, I loved the poem, lots of emotion and fulfillment. Keep it up my love. Love Always~*~your soul mate~*~ hehe. *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Thanks everybody, I'm glad that you all like this one. Angel, I'm glad that I meet your standards. I do aim to please. I hope that I can keep doing so. Sherm, Yep she is pretty special. thanks!! Jeremy, You were wrong, but all of the people that you thought it could be were quite special as well and I have poems written about them too. You know what those are. My princess, last but not least. Sometimes I just don't know what to say because your words are so kind and speak right to me. Thanks! With highes regards\ Jason Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well well what can i say...this girl must be really special to you...and my heart goes out to you...i am sorry that she did this to you...keep up the good work... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Well I have to say that she didn't do anything to me except make me want to be with her. It kills me because I can't. Thanks for the reply. Jason  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jason, This is so heartfelt... well penned indeed! regards, sudhir |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Sending you a virtual hug!! Hang in there, my friend. Your's is a pure and trusting heart. You won't be miserable forever. Love will find you. *~Meredith~* It's so obvious That the promise Keeps me here Painting pictures where All the colors Disappear *Lit |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Sudhir, it's nice to see youve journeyed over to my home. Thanks!! Meredith, Thanks for the hug. Its just what I needed today. Here, I'm virtually hugging you back!!  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
jacman what a great poem I really enjoyed this one!!! Probably one of my favorites of yours so far!! Your writing brings out such great emotion. I hope that you find a way to be with this girl... by the way, I love your quote, everytime I see it it brings back such strong memories for me!! "In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On" ~Robert Frost |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Jacman, Great poem. Good luck with this girl. I hope everything works itself out. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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