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The guy I could could dream of

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Brogan
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since 07-21-2000
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0 posted 07-21-2000 03:37 AM       View Profile for Brogan   Email Brogan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brogan

The guy I could only Dream of...........
Is tall, Has Bright blue eyes, and dark brown hair.
Takes me out were I want to go. Has a car not made yet. Has a house the does all the work for you. Want a 5 course meal there it is.
Has clothes that no one else has. Has a creadit card with no limit. Has a priavate Jet.
When you go to bed you can change anything in it. Need to change the paint on the wall to make it match a picture you just got. Change it.
Has a drink you can't buy anywere else. Has food never been tasted before.
The best looking guy you can find.
He is the the man of my Dreams...........  

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AngelShell
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since 03-01-2000
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not heaven nor hell so...


1 posted 07-21-2000 03:51 AM       View Profile for AngelShell   Email AngelShell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelShell

Hi!  Welcome to Passions.
First of all I would like to say that I hope you enjoy your time here, there are a lot of great poems to browse through and there are some poets on here with real talent.

Now, your poem was nice.  It told us a lot about what your 'dream man' was going to be like.
Just a sugestion.  Next time, try to include a few of your emotions into your poem.  It will give it a lot more kick.
But it was an excellent poem none the less, and a gret first post.
Keep it up.

Love Always,
Shell.
Kit McCallum
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since 04-30-2000
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Ontario, Canada


2 posted 07-21-2000 06:19 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Welcome to Passions Brogan!

Quite a dream man you've described! I'd like to see that house myself, nice imagery.  As long as your home is filled with love ... this would be a happy home indeed.    Hope to read more! Check your e-mail for a special message.

Best wishes,
/Kit
Chel
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since 07-01-2000
Posts 516
Baltimore, MD, USA


3 posted 07-21-2000 09:20 AM       View Profile for Chel   Email Chel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chel

Welcome to Passions!!!  Great first post.  Very interesting.  Keep up the good work, and I hope to read more soon.

Chel


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"Always do your best, you will always succeed"
StarPryncess17
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since 05-31-2000
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Colorado


4 posted 07-22-2000 07:32 PM       View Profile for StarPryncess17   Email StarPryncess17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StarPryncess17's Home Page   View IP for StarPryncess17

Welcome to Passions!!

This was a very heartfelt first post! I often wonder where the man of my dreams can be found...other than in my dreams. Guess I'll have to keep wondering...huh?

Hope to see more from you soon. Keep it up

Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~


*~* I wIsH I wAs A
LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn;
SkInNeD kNeEs AnD
bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE
eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a
BrOkEn HeArT!*~*

Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


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Enjoyed

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