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HerMelness
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since 07-12-2000
Posts 37
Bridgewater, NS, Canada


0 posted 07-20-2000 11:04 AM       View Profile for HerMelness   Email HerMelness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HerMelness's Home Page   View IP for HerMelness

I fail to see how your reluctance to open up has benefitted either of us.

I don't understand why you seem to believe that physical needs outweigh emotional trust.

It confuses me that I'm more satisfied by my time alone than when I'm with you.

I haven't noticed an ounce of improvement since we first realized we had a problem.

There's no longer passion waiting for me in your open arms.

And most importantly, I no longer recognize your voice in the song playing within my heart...


-Wherever you go, go with all your heart.-
© Copyright 2000 Melanie - All Rights Reserved
Fairy Princess
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since 07-19-2000
Posts 65
Fitchburg Ma, USA


1 posted 07-20-2000 11:24 AM       View Profile for Fairy Princess   Email Fairy Princess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fairy Princess's Home Page   View IP for Fairy Princess

Hey! Your poem was sad and really nice though. I hope who ever you wrote it for they should learn their lesson.  


((Peace out))
~*~Fairy Princess~*~
TrueLUV
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since 07-19-2000
Posts 163
Connecticut, U.S.A.


2 posted 07-20-2000 11:30 AM       View Profile for TrueLUV   Email TrueLUV   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TrueLUV

Hey Mel great poem, but it made me sad and it made me think about what people have and don't realize it until its gone from our reach.  Thanks,,,,, and thanks for your response to my poem and t was fiction  
AngelShell
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since 03-01-2000
Posts 526
not heaven nor hell so...


3 posted 07-21-2000 02:29 AM       View Profile for AngelShell   Email AngelShell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelShell

Yeah, a nice poem even though it was a little sad.  But what we have to realize is that there will be another and even thought it sounds harsh 'there are plenty more fish in the sea'.  Believe that and it doesn't feel so bad.

Love Always,
Shell.
Chel
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since 07-01-2000
Posts 516
Baltimore, MD, USA


4 posted 07-21-2000 09:14 AM       View Profile for Chel   Email Chel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chel

Great poem and I can only hope that this person realizes what he lost.  Keep your head up.  Keep up the good work, and I hope to read more.

Chel


"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"
StarPryncess17
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since 05-31-2000
Posts 944
Colorado


5 posted 07-22-2000 07:35 PM       View Profile for StarPryncess17   Email StarPryncess17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StarPryncess17's Home Page   View IP for StarPryncess17

Hey Mel, this was indeed a sad poem. It is very disheartening when we can no longer find in our hearts the love that we had once lived and longed for. I definately hope that you plan on moving on and stop the pain. Keep writing! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~


*~* I wIsH I wAs A
LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn;
SkInNeD kNeEs AnD
bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE
eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a
BrOkEn HeArT!*~*

Jenabou
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since 06-13-2000
Posts 223
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/US


6 posted 07-23-2000 11:57 AM       View Profile for Jenabou   Email Jenabou   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jenabou's Home Page   View IP for Jenabou

Mel i always love reading your poetry
even tho they are usualy sad and bitter they make me smile cos i love to see the sheer talent you have for writing!
Im not really sure who this is about but i have a good guess....i dunno why youd waste your talent writing a poem about him tho!!
keep em coming chick!!
Love Ya Bunches
    ~Jen~
          

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle
sherm
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since 07-21-2000
Posts 94
Evansville,IN


7 posted 07-23-2000 12:31 PM       View Profile for sherm   Email sherm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sherm

very sad but good poem     it really makes you think
the dark angel
Junior Member
since 05-10-2000
Posts 37


8 posted 07-23-2000 01:43 PM       View Profile for the dark angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the dark angel

Hey Mel.
Good poem.
Displays feeling well and very to the point

in other words. Cool hip and Groovy baby!
Luv ys.


Lani_DarkOne
Member
since 05-28-2000
Posts 152
UK


9 posted 07-24-2000 01:35 PM       View Profile for Lani_DarkOne   Email Lani_DarkOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lani_DarkOne

nice.. bursting with honesty..it's good you aren't fooling yourself, alot of people fall into that trap..

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~
Artic Wind
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since 09-16-2007
Posts 8075
Realm of Supernatural


10 posted 12-03-2007 08:26 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
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