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HerMelness
Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 37
Bridgewater, NS, Canada

0 posted 2000-07-20 11:04 AM


I fail to see how your reluctance to open up has benefitted either of us.

I don't understand why you seem to believe that physical needs outweigh emotional trust.

It confuses me that I'm more satisfied by my time alone than when I'm with you.

I haven't noticed an ounce of improvement since we first realized we had a problem.

There's no longer passion waiting for me in your open arms.

And most importantly, I no longer recognize your voice in the song playing within my heart...


-Wherever you go, go with all your heart.-

© Copyright 2000 Melanie - All Rights Reserved
Fairy Princess
Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 64
Fitchburg Ma, USA
1 posted 2000-07-20 11:24 AM


Hey! Your poem was sad and really nice though. I hope who ever you wrote it for they should learn their lesson.  


((Peace out))
~*~Fairy Princess~*~

TrueLUV
Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.
2 posted 2000-07-20 11:30 AM


Hey Mel great poem, but it made me sad and it made me think about what people have and don't realize it until its gone from our reach.  Thanks,,,,, and thanks for your response to my poem and t was fiction  
AngelShell
Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...
3 posted 2000-07-21 02:29 AM


Yeah, a nice poem even though it was a little sad.  But what we have to realize is that there will be another and even thought it sounds harsh 'there are plenty more fish in the sea'.  Believe that and it doesn't feel so bad.

Love Always,
Shell.

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
4 posted 2000-07-21 09:14 AM


Great poem and I can only hope that this person realizes what he lost.  Keep your head up.  Keep up the good work, and I hope to read more.

Chel


"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
5 posted 2000-07-22 07:35 PM


Hey Mel, this was indeed a sad poem. It is very disheartening when we can no longer find in our hearts the love that we had once lived and longed for. I definately hope that you plan on moving on and stop the pain. Keep writing! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~


*~* I wIsH I wAs A
LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn;
SkInNeD kNeEs AnD
bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE
eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a
BrOkEn HeArT!*~*


Jenabou
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA
6 posted 2000-07-23 11:57 AM


Mel i always love reading your poetry
even tho they are usualy sad and bitter they make me smile cos i love to see the sheer talent you have for writing!
Im not really sure who this is about but i have a good guess....i dunno why youd waste your talent writing a poem about him tho!!
keep em coming chick!!
Love Ya Bunches
    ~Jen~
          

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

sherm
Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 94
Evansville,IN
7 posted 2000-07-23 12:31 PM


very sad but good poem     it really makes you think
the dark angel
Junior Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 37

8 posted 2000-07-23 01:43 PM


Hey Mel.
Good poem.
Displays feeling well and very to the point

in other words. Cool hip and Groovy baby!
Luv ys.



Lani_DarkOne
Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152
UK
9 posted 2000-07-24 01:35 PM


nice.. bursting with honesty..it's good you aren't fooling yourself, alot of people fall into that trap..

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
10 posted 2007-12-03 08:26 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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