Welcome and good day to you. I've practically become addicted to this site, it's so gratifying to realize others feel your pain, and have their own problems. I liked your poem, I'm big on "Don't Drink and Drive" and I hope that this wasn't a true story. Good luck, and I hope you stay awhile. Jenn
First of all I'd like to say Welcome to passions!!
Second, this poem was absolutely wonderful, I'm so sorry to hear about this!! I hope you have learned what a few drinks can do to a person's life and how truly devastating the outcome can be. Best of luck in life my friend.
Third of all, the poem and message was all conveyed very well in your rhyming scheme, the theme remained through out. Nice work!
*~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~*
[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 07-20-2000).]
not heaven nor hell so...
Wow, a really strong piece. It is amazing to see that this is your first post. You may have been writing for a long time before you came here I guess. It's great to see that even though it was a painful experience for you, you managed to hold it together well. When I say that I mean the poem makes sense and I understand what you're getting at. Usually when I write about something that has had a major impact on my life, things get mixed up and it doesn't make sense. You managed it really well.