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Teen Poetry #3

Your the "One

TrueLUV
Member

since 2000-07-19

Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.

0 posted 2000-07-19 01:02 AM

I know you might of been hurt bad ,
But I can take away your pain and fears
Just let me into your world and share you love with me
Iam the guy to that would change your world
Because I just realized that your the girl for me

heartbroken
New Member

since 2000-07-25

Posts 9

1 posted 2000-10-04 11:04 AM

This is a really nice poem. I wish I could find a guy that would say something like that to me. I hope she realizies that you are a really nice guy!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2000-10-04 03:13 PM

I like the simplicity of this poem. very well done. The Idea was nice too. Hope you get her.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-10-04 05:00 PM

Great thoughts behind this one, I like the meaning of it and the effects of the shortness of the poem. Nice writing!

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

4 posted 2000-10-04 09:20 PM

This was so sweet TrueLuv!!!I hope you gave this to her!!!Keep it up...

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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