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Jacman
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since 06-27-2000
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Dwight Il, US


0 posted 07-18-2000 11:52 AM       View Profile for Jacman   Email Jacman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Jacman

Your eyes are the storm that ignites
the fire burning within me.
Your locks are a tender breeze
swirling about me.
I see on your cheeks the rose
of the garden which knoweth no boundry.
Your skin soft, as the touch of a ripe olive.
Your hands are tender, pure, and simple.
Your touch can heal all of my pain.
Your voice calls to me as I am sleeping.
my sweetest dreams are only because of you.
Your lips are full, and glow
as the dew on the lily in th eearly morning sun.
They are sweet as the nectar of a honeysuckle.
Your form is etched from the emerald
by the craftsman that knows not the meaning of time.
You are without blemish.
Your purity is as a fine wine
whose seal is not broken.
I would poor my soul into you
and never return to myself.
For on that day, will I become one with
.....you.....
© Copyright 2000 Jason Allen Carmen - All Rights Reserved
LoveBug
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1 posted 07-18-2000 12:14 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Jason, this is a beautiful poem! Wonderful writing, my friend. Keep up the good work!

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea
TAP2
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since 06-29-2000
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA


2 posted 07-18-2000 01:00 PM       View Profile for TAP2   Email TAP2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TAP2's Home Page   View IP for TAP2

Inspiring verse. That special someone sometimes leads us t wax eloquent at the mere thought of everything about them. Good job.

Thomas A. Plemmons

"I could have missed the pain
But I'd of had to miss The Dance"

-Garth Brooks-
Jeremy Halstead
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since 06-01-2000
Posts 572
Morris, Ill. U.S.A


3 posted 07-19-2000 06:08 AM       View Profile for Jeremy Halstead   Email Jeremy Halstead   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeremy Halstead

One of the most well writen, inspiring, descriptive, and just plain beautiful pieces I've ever read.   I told you that the first time I read it and now I've said it again.  you da man!!!

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 07-19-2000 07:04 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Wonderful Jason!  So filled with tender sentiments and incredible imagery ... well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
LiLOnE
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since 07-12-2000
Posts 42
Sudbury, Ma


5 posted 07-19-2000 09:03 AM       View Profile for LiLOnE   Email LiLOnE   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LiLOnE

Jason,
  This  poem is beautiful... There is obvioulsy some one very special in your life... Never let go!!! I look foward to reading more of your beautiful poems! If you would like to read some of mine I have then posted in  #8..
Beautiful work again!!
~*~LiLOnE~*~
LyricFetish
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since 01-13-2000
Posts 515
North Carolina


6 posted 07-19-2000 11:11 AM       View Profile for LyricFetish   Email LyricFetish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LyricFetish

It's so sweet that you wrote a poem all about me!! *ahem*
Seriously though, great writing, the person who inspired it must be very special. You rock my friend.

*~Meredith~*

It's so obvious
That the promise
Keeps me here
Painting pictures where
All the colors
Disappear
*Lit
StarPryncess17
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since 05-31-2000
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7 posted 07-19-2000 04:52 PM       View Profile for StarPryncess17   Email StarPryncess17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StarPryncess17's Home Page   View IP for StarPryncess17

the softest side seen yet of my musketeer friend! lol. you are wonderful Jason and I know this poem is about me so I'll keep it on the down low so now one knows ok?   j/k!! hehehe. Hope she knows how you feel hun! LOVE YA!! Love Always~*~Jessica*~


*~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~*
Jacman
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Dwight Il, US


8 posted 07-20-2000 11:17 AM       View Profile for Jacman   Email Jacman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jacman

Thanks for all of your replies.  

Love bug... I ended up only having to edit one line, but it turned out ok.  The only thing is, just now I can see where it just doesn't flow right in that area.

Tom... Well It's too bad that that special someone doesn't actually exhist.  This poem is about my dream girl.

Jeremy, Thinks man, These people really need to watch you keep yourself from blinking.

Kit...  Thank you, and really, you are too kind.

Lil one... Thanks alot, I will definitely check out #8.

Meredith... Like I said before to Tom, this is about my dream girl, and who knows it could be you.

Princess Jess... Ahh, last but not least.  Yah, definitely keep it on the down low because I might get goofy on Meredith.j/k.  But I read your e-mail and I think your right.  No joke.

Again thanks everybody, this really was my favorite.  I'm glad that you all liked it.

Jason
AngelShell
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since 03-01-2000
Posts 526
not heaven nor hell so...


9 posted 07-21-2000 04:25 AM       View Profile for AngelShell   Email AngelShell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelShell

Jason, this is truely magnificent!!!!
I don't think that I have read a poem in a while that inspired that much passion and light.  It is truely a wonderful piece of writing.
I could only wish that someone will think that about me one day.
You are obviously a guy that has been blessed with a love so strong and so pure that there aren't words strong enough to say what you feel.
I definately feel that this poem only scratched the surface of what you are feeling for this girl.
I will definately look for more of your writing in the future.
Make sure that you keep up the brilliant writing!!

Love Always,
Shell.
LyricFetish
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10 posted 07-21-2000 02:11 PM       View Profile for LyricFetish   Email LyricFetish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LyricFetish

Hey, well I'm glad to see I've got a shot at 'dream girl'. But you best not get goofy on me, or I'll have to write a mean poem about you, bud. HA! Right, anyway, be cool.

*~Meredith~*

It's so obvious
That the promise
Keeps me here
Painting pictures where
All the colors
Disappear
*Lit
Jacman
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since 06-27-2000
Posts 290
Dwight Il, US


11 posted 07-21-2000 06:03 PM       View Profile for Jacman   Email Jacman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jacman

Angell shell...

Well thank you very much, your kind words are very much appreciated.  Yes, I do tend to fall very deep into an emotional bliss at times.  Even when I don't mean to.

Meredith....

I wouldn't want that.  
BabyGirl1
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since 07-02-2000
Posts 91
Morris, IL


12 posted 07-21-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for BabyGirl1   Email BabyGirl1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BabyGirl1

Beatuiful poem Jay.  Since you posted this have you found your dream girl  (my sister?)   It better not be!!!  Just kiddin.  One day you will find that special someone to share all of that love you have inside of you and she sure will be a lucky lady.  But, if it is my sister, watch your back!! (ha-ha)

Love always,
BabyGirl1


"We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other."

-Luciano de Crescenzo-
AngelShell
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since 03-01-2000
Posts 526
not heaven nor hell so...


13 posted 07-21-2000 11:49 PM       View Profile for AngelShell   Email AngelShell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelShell

I think we all fall sometimes, whether we want to or not is definately a different story.
However it's good that you can do that when you are writing, it gives to something to power those creative juices that I know must flow very freely.

I really hope to hear more from you!!!

Love Always,
Shell.

Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
~Beautiful~
~Creed~
Artic Wind
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since 09-16-2007
Posts 8075
Realm of Supernatural


14 posted 12-02-2007 08:27 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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