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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2000-07-15 04:46 AM


It's odd...everyone always talk about wanting to "fall in love".  That's not even the good part...that's the test.  The good part is your reward...the everlasting comfort of being loved and befriended by that one soul that you need to breathe.  


All Our Lives

All our lives, we'll be in love.
For now we're still so young.
Ever changing buds of life,
with so much left undone.

All our lives, we'll be as one;
bonded through the storms
of growing old in a world
that longs to see us torn.

All our lives, in eachother's eyes,
we'll gaze in awe and see
the wonderful things we know
that no one else could be.

In countless moons, when we're aged
and battle scarred all over
you'll help me to bed at night
and share with me your cover.

In those years, when we're old
and pray our lives we keep,
I'll kiss your cheek, when we're alone
and then sing you to sleep.

We've not drank from the fountain
that keeps our hair or flesh
free from showing signs of what
our bodies now have left.
Yet our hearts and our love
will forever be revived
by the youthful wonder of love
that's been there all our lives.

Jeremy D. Halstead     7/15/00

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"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."




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TearsOfPearls
Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa
1 posted 2000-07-15 06:10 AM


This is a beautiful poem Jeremy, you hit the nail on the head!

Once again, a masterpiece you have writtin,
a wonderful gift God has givin'

Keep up the good writing

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-07-15 08:27 AM


Applause! Applause!  Masterfully written Jeremy, really well done. Your sentiments in this verse just flow so beautifully and come full circle ... excellent writing!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Martini
Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308
Toronto, Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2000-07-15 10:46 AM


Jeremy
I loved this one
It was great
excellent writing....

I so agree with you, falling in love is just the test, it's the rest of your life with that one person you love that is the good part....  It's being in love unconditionally not falling in love that's wonderful!!

Great work

TAP2
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
4 posted 2000-07-15 10:55 AM


This one hits close to home. Loved every line. It tells the story of what I hope my life will be. Great job.

Thomas A. Plemmons

"I could have missed the pain
But I'd of had to miss The Dance"

-Garth Brooks-

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
5 posted 2000-07-15 03:19 PM


man jeremy this is the best poem that i have read by you yet...keep up the good work...i am a big fan of yours...you got my vote...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
6 posted 2000-07-15 03:24 PM


Jeremy~BEAUTIFUL!!!!! I absolutely love this one!!! Keep it up! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~My fire is dead,it knew no pain; yet it is dead and I remain: All stiff with ice ashes lie;and they are dead, and I will die~*~

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
7 posted 2000-07-15 03:27 PM


Jeremy, I loved this one.  It was beautiful.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

Kandi
Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
8 posted 2000-07-15 11:48 PM


Hey Jeremy, sorry I haven't been around lately! But this is the first poem I read when I finally came back to our cozy little forum, and may I say wow?!? I really don't know what to say - you just have a very captivating way with words.  I think what I like best about this poem is that it really describes something I myself and a lot of other people hope to find someday, and it makes love and spending ur life with someone sound so incredibly beautiful (which is exactly how it's supposed to be).
GREAT job!
Love and Hugs
Kristin


~*All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe *~

~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

Jacman
Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
9 posted 2000-07-16 12:52 PM


Well Jer, I allways end up reading these things when I am dead tired.  And you know what kind of sapp I am when I am tired.  This poem really brought tears to my eyes.  I'm just so afraid of never having this feeling, or being able to experience love.  It seems that I often give it away so freely and never see it returned.  I just hope I don't run out.  Well I'm going to stop now before I start babbling.  I'll see you later man.

jason

sorrowfulangel
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59
Memphis,TN
10 posted 2000-07-16 02:27 AM


now i sit in envy of this poem darlin,marveously written....

"god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways"

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
11 posted 2000-07-16 11:36 PM


i never thought never in a million years that Jeremy that you could ever get any better from all your other wonderful work that i love. this is by far the best piece of yours i have read and i'm proud to say i have. keep it up my friend.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Vball Chickie1624
Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116
New York
12 posted 2000-07-16 11:39 PM


A beautiful poem.  Great expression...You did it once again..I love it = )

luv ya,
Danielle

"Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
13 posted 2007-12-01 11:17 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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