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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada 
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I look up as a tear rolls slowly down my cheek I think about better days and wonder if I'll feel that way again you look at me with those eyes I know so well always serious, so deep and insightful as though you're always in control But not today not now Now you look so scared like for once you don't have the answer I gaze at you looking deep into those hazel eyes Hoping to understand why you've said those things you did I wonder for a moment if this is all a dream if I shall wake in the morning and be relieved you look at me with a confusion I have never seen slowly pull me towards you and wipe the tears from my cheek "In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On" ~Robert Frost [This message has been edited by Martini (edited 07-13-2000).] |
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Kittie Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103 |
Wow, what a great poem, I really liked it a lot! There is a strong emotion that comes out, and that's great. I hope to read more, keep up the great work. Kittie |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Thanks so much for your kind words!!  |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
very raw. i like this a lot. a very unique flow on it too. it's got that style of yours that i'm starting to become i real fan of. =) almost always actions will speak louder than anything we could say. and that's what this was about. sometimes the questions and answers we think up can just be wiped away, like tears, in an embrace. sometimes an embrace says it all. good work, good vibes. "The bar is always open and the time is always right. If god's word goes unspoken, then the music plays all night." -Bradley Nowell |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Ethan thanks so much for the kind words... I have become quite a fan of yours!! You do great work. Your encouragement and kind thoughts are alway welcome and very much aprrieciated,if only he had wiped it all away with those tears, but it did help for a moment!! thanks again [This message has been edited by Martini (edited 07-13-2000).] |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
I think this is a great poem. I realy emjoyed reading this poem. Hope to read more of your poems and thanks for sharing this one. Lovely_kris |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
most of the tears we cry are because someone hurt us...its just to bad that all they will do is wipe the tears away...you showed so much feelings in the poem that i felt like i was in your place...keep up the good work... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
L_K : Thanks so much for reading!! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. ERIN: It is too bad that all they can do is wipe away the tears after they have hurt us, however sometimes that's enough to make it seem a little better, to show that they still care, I'm glad you enjoyed it. |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
This is a wonderful poem. You express so much emotion. It is always hard when someone hurts you in any way. SOmetimes, words can be the worst kind of hurt ever imaginable. "We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other." -Luciano de Crescenzo- |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
In this poem, you created such a vivid scene for me that it really did bring a tear to my eye. Very good, I'm glad you wrote this poem. jason  |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
babygirl... thanks so much what you said is so true. Jason, thanks so much your continous support and priase is appreciated.... I'm glad you enjoyed it!! "In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On" ~Robert Frost |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
well what much else is there to say other than, "NICE JOB!" you have a very unique style and I like it. Your words seem to come so easily. Keep up the writing and I hope that your heart heals soon enough. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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