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Slow tears

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Martini
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0 posted 07-13-2000 11:00 AM       View Profile for Martini   Email Martini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Martini


I look up
as a tear rolls slowly
down my cheek
I think about better days
and wonder if I'll feel that way again
you look at me
with those eyes I know so well
always serious, so deep and insightful
as though you're always in control
But not today
not now
Now you look so scared
like for once you don't have the answer
I gaze at you
looking deep into those hazel eyes
Hoping to understand
why you've said those things you did
I wonder for a moment
if this is all a dream
if I shall wake in the morning
and be relieved
you look at me
with a confusion I have never seen
slowly pull me towards you
and wipe the tears from my cheek


"In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On"
   ~Robert Frost




[This message has been edited by Martini (edited 07-13-2000).]
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Kittie
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since 07-08-2000
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1 posted 07-13-2000 01:02 PM       View Profile for Kittie   Email Kittie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kittie

Wow, what a great poem, I really liked it a lot!  There is a strong emotion that comes out, and that's great.  I hope to read more, keep up the great work.
Kittie


Martini
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2 posted 07-13-2000 01:09 PM       View Profile for Martini   Email Martini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Martini

Thanks so much for your kind words!!  
Ethan Halo
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since 04-28-2000
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on the roof again


3 posted 07-13-2000 01:12 PM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

very raw. i like this a lot. a very unique flow on it too. it's got that style of yours that i'm starting to become i real fan of. =)
almost always actions will speak louder than anything we could say. and that's what this was about. sometimes the questions and answers we think up can just be wiped away, like tears, in an embrace. sometimes an embrace says it all.
good work, good vibes.

"The bar is always open
and the time is always right.
If god's word goes unspoken,
then the music plays all night."

-Bradley Nowell

Martini
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4 posted 07-13-2000 01:19 PM       View Profile for Martini   Email Martini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Martini

Ethan
thanks so much for the kind words... I have become quite a fan of yours!!  You do great work.
Your encouragement and kind thoughts are alway welcome and very much aprrieciated,if only he had wiped it all away with those tears, but it did help for a moment!!
thanks again


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Lovely_Kris
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5 posted 07-13-2000 05:54 PM       View Profile for Lovely_Kris   Email Lovely_Kris   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lovely_Kris

I think this is a great poem. I realy emjoyed reading this poem. Hope to read more of your poems and thanks for sharing this one.
Lovely_kris
Erin
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since 06-15-2000
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6 posted 07-14-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for Erin   Email Erin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Erin

most of the tears we cry are because someone hurt us...its just to bad that all they will do is wipe the tears away...you showed so much feelings in the poem that i felt like i was in your place...keep up the good work...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~
Martini
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7 posted 07-14-2000 02:56 PM       View Profile for Martini   Email Martini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Martini

L_K :
Thanks so much for reading!!  I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.  

ERIN:  It is too bad that all they can do is wipe away the tears after they have hurt us, however sometimes that's enough to make it seem a little better, to show that they still care, I'm glad you enjoyed it.  
BabyGirl1
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since 07-02-2000
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8 posted 07-14-2000 10:31 PM       View Profile for BabyGirl1   Email BabyGirl1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BabyGirl1

This is a wonderful poem.  You express so much emotion.  It is always hard when someone hurts you in any way.  SOmetimes, words can be the worst kind of hurt ever imaginable.  

"We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other."

-Luciano de Crescenzo-
Jacman
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9 posted 07-15-2000 12:46 AM       View Profile for Jacman   Email Jacman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jacman

In this poem, you created such a vivid scene for me that it really did bring a tear to my eye.  Very good, I'm glad you wrote this poem.

jason
Martini
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10 posted 07-21-2000 12:15 PM       View Profile for Martini   Email Martini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Martini

babygirl...
thanks so much what you said is so true.

Jason, thanks so much
your continous support and priase is appreciated.... I'm glad you enjoyed it!!

"In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On"
~Robert Frost
StarPryncess17
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11 posted 07-22-2000 07:24 PM       View Profile for StarPryncess17   Email StarPryncess17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StarPryncess17's Home Page   View IP for StarPryncess17

well what much else is there to say other than, "NICE JOB!" you have a very unique style and I like it. Your words seem to come so easily. Keep up the writing and I hope that your heart heals soon enough. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

*~* I wIsH I wAs A
LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn;
SkInNeD kNeEs AnD
bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE
eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a
BrOkEn HeArT!*~*

Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


12 posted 12-02-2007 08:30 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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