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Kittie
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since 2000-07-08
Posts 103


0 posted 2000-07-12 02:54 PM


*A tribute to my first love in a thank you for my first kiss*

Did you know
that flowers love to spring
even when the snow
has fallen to the ground
in flakes so grand
yet can't compare
to the urge the flowers own?
And that fields will bloom
all at once
with a single prance
of a flower bud
that has fallen tenderly
from a sky so blue
yet filled with rainbows
that are dancing with
all the beautiful butterflies?
When all the world around
seems in their own war,
did you know the birds chirp
and swing on the vines
that dangle from the tall oak tree
he and I climb together?
Even at the age of five,
I trust he won't let me fall,
and that wedding bells will ring
while the dove flying above sings
our happy melody song
that he plays so grandly
with those wonderful brown eyes.

© Copyright 2000 Kittie - All Rights Reserved
Lovely_Kris
Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

1 posted 2000-07-12 04:20 PM


I really like your poem Kittie! I think you did a great job. Hope you read more

Lovely_Kris

Snickers
Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT
2 posted 2000-07-12 04:29 PM


Kittie,
  I like the imagery u used.  I could almost see what u were writing.  Isn't it amazing how words can paint an image so descriptive it's more satisfying that sight?  Your poem iz beautiful and essentially sweet.  Keep it up.

~<3 Alwayz~
  **Nikki**


~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
3 posted 2000-07-13 11:24 AM


This was very well written.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

Ethan Halo
Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
4 posted 2000-07-13 01:17 PM


a beautiful example of vivid word imagery. this paints a wonderful picture, of both the physical and emotional places you travel here.
good stuff. i dig it.

"The bar is always open
and the time is always right.
If god's word goes unspoken,
then the music plays all night."

-Bradley Nowell


BabyGirl1
Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91
Morris, IL
5 posted 2000-07-14 12:19 PM


This is a wonderful and beautiful poem.  I would have to say that it is my favorite poem i've read since i've been here!  Your style of writing is wonderful and the imagery that you used was great.  Can't wait to read more!

"We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other."

-Luciano de Crescenzo-

TAP2
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
6 posted 2000-07-14 02:01 AM


Love your style! Very well written. I only have one question: Why wasn't this a book submission? It belongs there.

Thomas A. Plemmons

"I could have missed the pain
But I'd of had to miss The Dance"

-Garth Brooks-

Rayz
Junior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 13
Fresno, CA, U.S.A
7 posted 2000-07-14 02:59 PM


Kittie
     You did a awsome job on this poem, It really was very easy to imagine everything you were saying and made me think. Great job


Ray

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
8 posted 2000-07-15 04:13 AM


I agree with Tom(TAP2), this belongs in the book.  For once, I actually have the look of love in my eyes right now...thank you for bringing that to me.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
9 posted 2007-12-01 11:11 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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