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Teen Poetry #3

Keeper of my heart

InnermostBurn
New Member

since 2000-07-12

Posts 2

0 posted 2000-07-12 02:56 AM

"Keeper of my heart"

Klepto of my mind, heart,
my very being,
i could never tell if you knew,
what feelings I yearn to divulge,
what began as lust,
morphed into love,at least what i consider love,
what you call a friendship,
I embelish in my mind and wish for more,
I have so many plans for us in my head,
with a hope of fulfilling them all,
dating, marriage, family to name a few,
one day i will shout out all of these,
and ican't wait till that day,
and that day will be a momentouse surge of feelings,
that I hope will not be disregarded.

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

1 posted 2000-07-12 05:32 AM

Your vocab and use of words are great. The way you bring your feelings so clear into my heart is spectacular. Maybe you should try something with some rhyme or more defined rhythm...just a thougth. wonderful work.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

TAP2
Member

since 2000-06-29

Posts 211
Morris, Il USA

2 posted 2000-07-12 10:15 AM

Once again you've done a great job. It's hard when the person you have affections for does not share them, I know, I've been there. Just know that all things in time will be revealed. God has a purpose.

Thomas

"I could have missed the pain
But I'd of had to miss The Dance"

-Garth Brooks-

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2000-07-12 11:54 AM

you have a great way of expressing your feelings. I'd love to read more of your poems.

Kandi83
New Member

since 1999-08-19

Posts 4
Phoenix, Az, US

4 posted 2000-07-18 03:49 AM

Very nice poem....I'm sorry that I don't feel the same way about you.....Only time will tell.....but for now, I'm sorry hon, but you are only a friend.....A really great friend....and you know what they say.....you always end up with your best friend (of the oppiste sex unless you swing that way).

Kandiss

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2007-12-02 12:54 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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