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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
I think I've been experiencing acute writers block for the past couple of weeks. But finally, I've come up with something, which would be this. Lemme know what u think. Thanx! ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** *~°What Lies Beneath°~* "Why do you wear so much makeup?" Do you really have to ask. "Because, you see, the makeup, it serves as a protective mask" I hide my insecurities, my fears and my doubts. With just the right lipstick, I can find a smile within a pout. I touch up my eyes, So you won't see how much I've cried. And I've had enough practice, That you won't be able to see through my lies. I apply the makeup onto a scarred face. It covers my tears, and defines my grace. It erases my pain, and replaces it with beauty. I have to be aesthetically pleasing, I feel it's my duty. You look at me, and see a pretty face. And the personality that matches it, is not a disgrace. But this isn't me you see, my personality is fake too. Why do I feel that the real me, wouldn't appeal to you? If I shed the makeup, and you saw the true me, Would you care for what lies beneath? Are you brave enough to see? ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
This is a wonderful poem! I like how you used makeup as a mask. We all wear a mask at some time or another. "We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other." -Luciano de Crescenzo- |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
So true, so true. Many people hide bhind different "masks", for different reasons. I enjoyed reading the poem, and like how you got your point across. |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
Babygirl and Driven~Thank you so much for your replies!!! I appreciate your comments!  ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
There have been alot of poems about masks in here within the last week or so, each one expressing a different view of the same thing or a different mask. I loved this piece. If we all had the courage to accept people for who and what they are, maybe then they would have the courage to take off the mask. Thomas "I could have missed the pain But I'd of had to miss The Dance" -Garth Brooks- |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
awesome.....just plain amazing you deserve five smiling faces tell me this though, what happens if this person falls for the person you pretend to be. no matter what you do, the real you will come out and he might not like it and someones gonna end up more hurt. it's always best to show your true self and if the other person doesn't like it then you both were not meant to be. |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
TAP and acire~ Thank u so much for replying and stating your opinions and comments. Acire, to answer your question: I think that is the whole problem. Someone falls for someone else's act and when the real person comes out, it's often not good enough. But the reason the person puts on act to begin with is because they feel inferior, and the act is like a guard against rejection. I'm probably confusing you, b/c I've confused myself as well. Sorry, but lemme know if u get what I'm trying to say. Thanx. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Awesome poem. You've really brought me into your world with this one. *~Meredith~* It's so obvious That the promise Keeps me here Painting pictures where All the colors Disappear *Lit |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
god must have given you writers block for a reason...and if i may say for a really good reason...this poem is very good...but see all of us girls that wear makeup are really just putting on a mask...as you put it...keep up the good work... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
I think you did a great job on this poem. And i hope to read more of your poems Lovely_Kris [This message has been edited by Lovely_Kris (edited 07-12-2000).] |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
yet another mask poem. i do believe it is the theme of the week! you have done well in taking up the torch! seriously, this is well-penned. it just goes to show that people have worlds more to them than the ones that they put on in the morning. it's not right to hide some things, because some things need to see the light of day, but everyone's got secrets. good work. i dig it. We all got our demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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ConderE Junior Member
since 1999-08-14
Posts 29TX, USA |
This was a great poem. I really enjoyed it. I haven't read too many of the other mask type poems...but this one was awesome. But even as a guy...I can understand this. I always put on a mask for fear of letting my true self known because people may not accept how I am. This was a refreshing poem. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
There have been a few "mask" poems this week (I started the trend..hehehe), but I love how you used each piece of make-up as a seperate stanza and separate piece to the puzzle..very creative. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
this was a very good poem but so very sad at the same time i know how you feel . ive been there before too. but shed the make-up be the real you if they dont like it,they werent worth it in the first place and you can find someone who does like "what lies beneath" keep writing!  The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
Thank u, thank u, THANK U to everyone who replied!! I always fill a lil special when ppl choose to respond to my work! Anwyays, I have read quite a few poems about masks in here lately, which is what inspired me to write this. I think so many ppl write about this topic b/c it's such a familiar thing to them. Actually, when u think about it it's kinda sad how many ppl can relate to the feeling. Jenabou~I so wish it was as easy as just taking off the makeup, but it reallly isn't, at least not for me. I just have this fear of ppl not accepting me, and so I change (my apperance, but my personality as well) into something I think they will like. But I seriously think I'm gonna have to let the real me come out soon enough. Thanx. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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