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My Demise
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My Demise |
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Wet Member
since 1999-07-25
Posts 60Brentwood, Tn |
My Demise The endless death is near The demise of me shall be unforgiving. For I have done something alot of people haven't I have used my mind for what it is, What it was meant for. For that shall I suffer when I die? For I am suffering now, I am suffering because of you. All of you who don't think. Who don't explore their mind to the brink of insainity. For all of you my demise is near. But at least it won't be with you. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. Another old one for you people to read... I really liked this, it was creepy in a way but really thought provoking. Great job. The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like the meaning of this. It's very thought out and thought provoking. Good writing  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The ending was witty and made me smirk. I like the part about exploring the mind until the brink of insanity, i often do that. LIke i cant unweave the mesh of thoughts that clutter up my thought process, its so annoying.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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