navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » Emptiness
Teen Poetry #3
Post A Reply Post New Topic Emptiness Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Jenn Cirrincione
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107
Fl

0 posted 2000-07-08 02:54 PM


Don't you know I've wished for you?
Can you tell you've painted me thrilled?
See my elation,
Feel my heart skip beats for your love.

Yet, today I look around and see you're empty,
I see your imperfections,
I view all of your flaws,
Love was never there...

You deserve someone with pure love,
You need someone with matching affections,
Please forgive my absence,
It's all done for freedom's sake.

© Copyright 2000 Jennifer Parker - All Rights Reserved
Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
1 posted 2000-07-08 07:20 PM


I liked this poem.  It was short, but it had a point which I liked.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
2 posted 2000-07-09 02:04 PM


yes i to enjoyed the point please do keep it up. and your writing is very good my friend.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Jacman
Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
3 posted 2000-07-09 02:45 PM


Very good, this one hits really close to home.  Now I'm off to read more.

jason

Acies
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
4 posted 2000-10-03 05:15 PM


I can't believe i missed this one too. I'm glad I've decided to search for all your poems.  This is really good and your use of words is extra ordinary. keep it up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
5 posted 2000-10-03 11:51 PM


Jenn~You have all these hidden poems that I havent read yet...But I am glad Acire brought this back up...I had a chance to read it...You just opened yourself up and got straight to the point...I wish I could do that...Keep up the good work!!!

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Jenn Cirrincione
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107
Fl
6 posted 2000-10-04 07:11 AM


I'm sure I have about another thirty or so! I didn't know that you guys hadn't read most of them yet! I started in here way back in July, so I just started posting stuff then. I'm glad you guys like what I do, that's important to me.
Jenn

"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
7 posted 2000-10-04 03:47 PM


I really like how you've expressed yourself here, great job
peanogrl83
Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202

8 posted 2000-10-04 05:14 PM


Ahhh Jenn, if only I could say that I didn't understand what you meant here...... lol. Keep up the good work!

Vreni

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » Emptiness

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary