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Secsyy lil angel
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since 2000-05-30
Posts 36
Portland Oregon, USA

0 posted 2000-07-06 11:20 PM



My life is like a circle
It doesn't have an end
It will never find a way to break
For it can only bend

Each day is just another part
Of the continuous cycle I go through
One day I will be happy
The next day very blue

A road of ups and downs
Risks for every heart
Feelings of unhappiness
Fears that do not depart

Yet there are joys and lots of laughter
Smiles I will never forget
Good times that are with out the bad
And things I don't regret

The bad times never last
For my life keeps going on
Cause my circle cannot be broken
It will forever stay very strong



~*Love exists only in the hearts of those who choose to acknowledge its existence...*~

*~To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.~*

© Copyright 2000 Kia - All Rights Reserved
Comfrey83
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since 2000-04-02
Posts 36
Winchester, Mass USA
1 posted 2000-07-06 11:31 PM


i kinda agree with what you said and kinda dont. for we as poeple must take good wiht bad as you say however the view of good and bad is kinda funky to me. bad things leave you and so do good things. it seems you dont dwell on the goods and bads but keep truckin on. lookit the goods in the bads and vice versa. because they  could be the last things the intangible end of a circle. im not trying to sound all wierdo hippy surrealist but the best poetry "or at least in my opinion" comes from the poeple who do take ups as downs and vice versa. thins isnt coming out as i had hopped but i liked your peom format and such but have trouble ith some of the stuff you say.
keep on truckin eh?
-Andy

Secsyy lil angel
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since 2000-05-30
Posts 36
Portland Oregon, USA
2 posted 2000-07-06 11:35 PM


Andy ~

I think i see what you are saying here....sorta.  See, I was trying to make the poem a happy one!   Just trying to point out that no matter how bad things get, they always will get better.  Maybe it didn't come out right.


~*Love exists only in the hearts of those who choose to acknowledge its existence...*~

*~To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.~*

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
3 posted 2000-07-07 12:21 PM


Great stuff, I enjoy your poem tremendously. I feel that way about life too.  For me good days and bad days are very well pronounced, because all the good things happen to me simultaniously, and so do all the bad.
TAP2
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
4 posted 2000-07-07 01:22 AM


Indeed we all have our ups and downs, seperate, yet the same. I loved this piece, hope to see more like it.

Thomas

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2000-07-07 05:45 AM


You've expressed your sentiments really well here Secsyy lil angel!  I've always believed that without the bad days, how can we possibly appreciate the good days.  Loved the way your thoughts came together in this wonderful and positive poem!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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6 posted 2000-07-07 10:28 AM


I love this poem for it's very true.  I agree with Kim too, without the bad, how could we even appreciate the good.  Great poem secsyy lil angel  
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
7 posted 2007-12-01 10:37 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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