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Zombie Man
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 52
Va

0 posted 2000-07-05 10:20 PM


WHEN I LOOK IN YOUR EYES I SEE LOVE
WHEN YOU LOOK IN MY EYES YOU SEE DEATH
WHY MUST I BE EVIL
WHY MUST I BE FULL OF HATE
YOU LIVE A LIFE OF FUN
WHILE I LIVE A LIFE OF HELL
YOUR ALWAYS WITH FRIENDS WHO CARE
WHILE I JUST  HOPE FOR SOMEONE TO HELP ME
NOBODY CAN SEE MY PAIN
I JUST WALK AROUND
WHERE DID I COME FROM
WHERE DO I BELONG
YOU BELONG WITH OTHERS
WHILE I BELONG ALONE
JUST TO DRIFT WITH THE WIND
TO LIVE ALONE
STAY ALONE
TO DIE....
ALONE.........


© Copyright 2000 Michael Cheeseman II - All Rights Reserved
Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

1 posted 2000-07-05 11:13 PM


Hey!  That was a good poem....but i have 1 question.  Do you really feel that way?  Keep up the writing
Bel

April Resi
Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119
Alabama
2 posted 2000-07-05 11:42 PM


That was such a great piece... but so dark. I hope you don't really believe that you are meant to be so utterly alone. No one is meant to be like that... sometimes it takes someone who is completely different to make a difference in you though.
Like I said, no one deserves to be that alone. Just give people a chance to get closer to you and have an open mind.
Hope it gets better for you.
April

Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2000-07-06 07:33 AM


This was so full of emotion ZombieMan! Such a heart-wrenching poem ... I do hope you'll find some answers to these questions you seek.  Nicely expressed ... keep up the great writing!

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 07-06-2000).]

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
4 posted 2000-07-06 08:48 AM


Hey there, I enjoyed this poem and I hope it really isn't how you really feel.  I can only hope that like Kit said you find answers to those questions.  Take care and keep your head up.

Luv always
Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
5 posted 2007-12-01 10:28 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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