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StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
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Colorado

0 posted 2000-07-04 05:40 PM


Be still my quiet little heart
Eventually these storm clouds will part
Soon, the sun will come flashin out
And your happiness will spread about
Never again will you feel ashamed
And you shall not be blamed
You have done nothing wrong
Please sing your beatiful song
Before, nothing else mattered
But never again will your dreams be shattered
Open your eyes, my beautiful child
And see that you are allowed to be wild
Now can you see?
You are finally free!!

~*~This is to anyone who has ever blamed themselves for something! the only place you will find freedom is through happiness, and the onlt place to find happiness is through forgiveness~*~


~*~My fire is dead,it knew no pain; yet it is dead and I remain: All stiff with ice ashes lie;and they are dead, and I will die~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes

© Copyright 2000 Jessica Lynn - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-07-04 05:57 PM


you should start submitting your poems for the book...cuz they are qutie good...this is the truth...they only way to forgive is through happiness...but not with me and my best friend...something bad happened and thats how we started to talk again...keep up the good work and start submitting it...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-07-04 05:58 PM


^
LOOK I WAS THE FIRST REPLY TO YOURS!!!!!!!!!!OHH AND THE SECOND ONE....i feel so special now....haha
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~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~




[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 07-04-2000).]

**AANGELLE**
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 45

3 posted 2000-07-04 06:44 PM


I really loved this poem.I agree that blaming yourself can really tear you up inside. well done
Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
4 posted 2000-07-04 07:09 PM


Jess...it seems like you're getting better everyday lately.  I'm really proud of you.  You've always been good...but now it seems like you're exploring another level.  Just let the depictions inside you flow.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Jacman
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since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
5 posted 2000-07-04 08:03 PM


Jess, very true.  This is something that alot of people need to learn.  Blaming ones self for something out of they're own power is redundant and it only will hurt them.  The only time you should blame yourself is when it really is your falt. Very nice piece keep them coming, and please, feel loved.

jason

I had to edit this because i am a retard and can't spell my own name..




[This message has been edited by Jacman (edited 07-04-2000).]

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
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Ontario, Canada
6 posted 2000-07-05 05:54 AM


Excellent StarPryncess!  Such a postive wonderful flow to this poem. I love the message you portray here!  Applause!!!

Very well done, best wishes,
/Kit

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
7 posted 2000-07-05 10:41 AM


I like this poem. It's very positive. You are a great writer. Blaming oneslf is self-destructive
buttercup411
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since 2000-07-03
Posts 41
miami, fl, u.s
8 posted 2000-07-05 11:47 AM


this is a very pretty poem... is actually  really uplifting it made me feel a little better... you should really enter it for the book thing
LoveBug
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9 posted 2000-07-05 11:54 AM


This is a beautiful piece. True, you can only find peace when you forgive yourself...

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
10 posted 2000-07-05 12:23 PM


Hey Jess,
   Great poem.  I enjoyed it very much, it seemed to have a more positve vibe to it, and I liked it.  Keep it up.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"

LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
11 posted 2000-07-05 01:50 PM


How very true it is, that harboring resentment towards yourself only brings undeserved heart-ache and storm clouds. I admit that I've struggled with guilt over situations beyond my control several times, and those times have been the darkest and most depressing times of my life. I love your poem, it is a lesson we should all learn. Thank you!

*~Meredith~*

I am none but the angel
Who sings you to sleep
As you pray to God
Your soul to keep
*Me

Angel
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since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
Pennsylvania
12 posted 2000-07-05 07:14 PM


I really like this poem and can really, really relate. Great advice too  !

~Susie


"Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?"
~Cinderella



Alwye
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In the space between moments
13 posted 2000-07-06 12:03 PM


I'm very impressed!  This is beautiful, well written, and with such a great message!  We can all indeed relate.    Keep up the phenomenal work!

*Krista Knutson*

"We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~

Acies
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14 posted 2000-07-06 10:06 AM


This time, I think you deserve a standing ovation.  Your poems are getting better and better.  I guess talent in writing is born in a person, and you have it.  Keep writing cause I wanna keep reading them.
TAP2
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
15 posted 2000-07-06 03:14 PM


Jess,
Beautiful, beautiful work! Loved every line. There is hope in ourselves, if we reach down far enough. Glad you are finding the better sides of existence. Happiness lies within.

Thomas

TearsOfPearls
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa
16 posted 2000-07-06 03:37 PM


This is a lovely poem, and so true. It's one of the most important lessons, and the hardest. I for one has failed this test many times.

One can forgive, but it is hard to forget.

Absolutely fantastic poem, and I think you should think about submitting it for the book, it is great  

Keep it up!

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

Acies
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17 posted 2000-09-24 03:40 PM


This i didn't miss.  But I'm bumping it ~*bump*~ cause i think the new members should read this.  This poem is one of the best ones I've read in passions and I think the new members will benefit in reading this poem.  Great message to spread to all

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
18 posted 2000-09-24 04:36 PM


forgiveness is a very good theme that many of us tend to leave out of our lives. good read. keep up the great work.

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
19 posted 2000-09-24 04:40 PM


Acire
what a sweetheart you are! I agree it is something that needs to be understood. and thank you kindly for the *bump* hehe  
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~
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~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-24-2000).]
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