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Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
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washing DC

0 posted 2000-07-04 12:43 PM


I love to think about you
When my day is down
When soul has burned
and shot
and dragged to the gutter…

Then I start to dream.
Maybe I'll never have you,
But the thought of you,
and your kiss
puts my soul at rest,
In bliss

© Copyright 2000 Jose Marti - All Rights Reserved
LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
1 posted 2000-07-04 01:16 PM


WoW, awesome poem! I'm impressed. Very heart-felt.

*~Meredith~*

I am none but the angel
Who sings you to sleep
As you pray to God
Your soul to keep
*Me

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
2 posted 2000-07-04 03:36 PM


This is a woderful poem and it depicts your true feelings about this person very very well. I'm glad you have such a person in your life, and don't look at the side of not "having" them because you will never know if you don't at least give it a try. Keep up the faith and best of luck to you my friend, Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-07-04 05:22 PM


well i agree with what jessica says...you shouldnt give up if you havent even tried...maybe this girl feels the same way about you that you feel about her...but you dont know how she feels...this is a good poem...i really like it...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

LoveBug
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4 posted 2000-07-04 06:21 PM


Welcome to Passions!

This is a wonderful poem... dreams are enough to comfort the soul, I know. Nothing like the reality would be, but it's better than nothing. I can relate to this very well.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
5 posted 2000-07-05 12:34 PM


I love poems about dreams.  Every depiction of thier wonder captivates me.  This one included.  Keep it up.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

AndrewDL
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since 2000-07-02
Posts 24
California
6 posted 2000-07-05 01:21 AM


Great work, its short length really makes it effective. I liked the way you added a couple of lines conveying some of your hopelessness, it gives the poem added depth. Great work.

-Andrew
Trust too much, and you may be deceived, but trust too little and you will live in torment forever.

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
7 posted 2000-07-05 12:05 PM


Hey sweetheart,
   I loved this poem very much.  I love you too.  I hope that you keep this up.  You are a good writer and I hope that never loose this quality.

Luv always,
Michelle

"True friends stab you in the front"

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
8 posted 2000-07-06 12:11 PM


i loved this poem alot and hope to see more from you like this one. so do keep it up and your dreams alive.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Candy
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since 2000-01-24
Posts 17

9 posted 2000-07-06 01:40 AM


i cant really say ive done this alot. but i finally got my dream to come true. good luck to you!

Candy

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
10 posted 2000-07-06 04:11 PM


Thnaks guys! I'm glad you liked my poem. I was afraid it might be to strong,
The_Driven
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 60

11 posted 2000-08-20 01:10 AM


This really is a nice poem, that depicts very well, how you feel about this person. Keep up the good poetry. This was very well done.
jennie may*
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 122

12 posted 2000-08-20 02:13 AM


short and sweet-I love this.  you gotta have faith and dreams or the world will eat you up.  good poem!

"We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
13 posted 2000-08-20 12:32 PM


Where did this come from.
this was one of my first posts here!!
I can't believe it!
thanx for bringing this one back

JR
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since 2000-08-19
Posts 22
morris il
14 posted 2000-08-20 01:00 PM


hey grat job on that poem.  It was creative and cute at the same time 2 qualities most people have to work at , but they come naturally to you.  Keep up the writing.


Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
15 posted 2000-08-20 06:58 PM


Wow, this is so cool.  It brought wonderful thoughts into my head, you did a great job with it
Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

16 posted 2000-08-21 10:02 AM


VEry nice Jose.....great sentiments you've put in this. I love your poetic style, it's beautiful!

Salooma

Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

17 posted 2000-08-21 04:28 PM


wounderful poem I think you did a great job! Keep up the great work and hope to read more.
Lovely_Kris


[This message has been edited by Lovely_Kris (edited 08-21-2000).]

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
18 posted 2000-08-23 01:08 PM


thanks guys for reading my poem,
Driven~ thanks a bunch for digging this poem up. It made me realize how much i've posted in the month and a half that I've been here.

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