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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
If love is blind then all are lost Stumbling in the dark Sightlessly caring for anything Everyone plays a part If life's a stage we write the script Personality the pen The final act the final part We all will meet our end If hate is pain then pain released Will set everyone free When we all see everyone As love was meant to be... Thomas If anyone cares to add to this piece, please do so in your replies. Thank you. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful poem, and a wonderful idea! I'll contribute some stanzas, and I hope everyone will do the same! If you learned to love another As our Heavenly father loves you Then no one would ever feel alone With no one to care what they do If we could learn it's ok to cry And to let go of our pride Maybe kids wouldn't explode and kill Because of things hidden inside... "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Definately another that I'm very fond of Thomas!!! I love it! And as for adding stanzas, I'd love to, just not feeling very creative right now. I'll reply again later with something creative I PROMISE!!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~  ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Great! You are waaaaay too good at this! I can't think of anything to add at the moment-----but definetely keep it up! Bel |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent poem Thomas! Beautifully written and a lovely flow ... lets see if I can add a few after LoveBug to keep it going ... *** If every day were easy, Always flowed without a care, Then how could we determine If we're really happy here? If we could not experience A "down" day now and then, We never could appreciate The "happy" days, my friend. *** Great poem Thomas! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Maybe some other time I'll add to it...but right now, I'm just enjoying having read it. I like question poems like that. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Thank you so much for your continuations and replies. The world certainly would be a better place, IF... You're all very gifted, I am proud to be in this circle. TAP2 |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well another great piece from you. sorry i can't add anything to this right now i'm in the middle an idea right now thinking out a poem. well got to go write it down. love your work keep it up and i'll reply later with something to add. |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
if we could see each others hearts. would we cause each other much pain? if all the pain that you felt, could be felt by one of us. If only I knew how it all will end, I would tell you now my friend. the only thing that I know for sure, is that its dust to dust once again. I hope that this is worthy to have a place with your talent. I did the best that I could. Hope you like it. jason [This message has been edited by Jacman (edited 07-04-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
this is a poem that i really like...i give you props for this...do you care if i print it out??? ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
oops sorry i accidentally pressed the button twice...font>< !signature--> ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 07-04-2000).] |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
You are such a great writer! You need to let me have some of your passion for writing. You already know that I have nothing to add, but I'm sure that you will find something. |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
I loved this poem and I am sorry that I can't add anything, but I think that people who did come up with add ons did a great job and, then it will make it even better. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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