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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
You asked why you didn't get a father's day card. I can't believe your ignorance you stupid fool! Because of you and only you, my heart is forever scarred. You see, fathers deserve recognition on father's day. And you, Everett, are hardly that! Because you chose her over me I'm the one who's had to pay Fathers do special things for their kids and show 'em that they care You still have yet to do that--Hello I'm still waiting! Are you that blind you can't see the pain I've had to bare?!?! Even if divorced fathers pick up their children when they're supposed to. You couldn't even do that because I sat waiting for you!! Just sitting there like a fool waiting, crying because you knew. You knew I was coming over I told you that. You didnt care-you could care less that you hurt me so You know, you're just like a selfish rat!! My heart's been broken by you time after time But I'm done now-you can't hurt me any more. And now that my life's missing the pain you cause it's sublime!! So you see, my dear father, my heart's forever scarred. I'll thank you for that later. Later, when I send you a father's day card. ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
The bitterness you wished to convey was conveyed perfectly. Keep writing from the heart. TAP2 |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
i think that this is the best poem that i have ever read...i really liked it...it sad that your dad would expect a fathers day card from you...when he shuts you out of his life for someone else...it hurts doesnt...it does for me... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I'm so sorry that you don't have a good father. You didn't choose to have a lousy father like this. We don't get a lot of choices in life, but we do get some. You have a choice in this matter, also. You can choose to let the bitterness and anger hurt you worse and anything else could, or you can let go of it. I hope you let go, my friend. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Sorry to hear about your father. It will only get worse before it gets better. Sorry to tell you that, but the truth hurts. Well I love the poem and I hope things work out in the end. Luv always Chel "True friends stab you in the front" |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Hey kid, I continue feel bad about this ordeal...at least you have the skills to be able to write about it and entertain all of us...Love ya. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i'm sorry about your father i've heard about this before from you and i'm sorry things have not gotten better for you. i hope they will soon my friend love Jeremiah I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I'm sorry about your father. You may come one day, to look upon that day, and laugh. Remeber the famous expression: Whatever doesn,t kill you, can only make you stronger. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
A quick message to all those who replied, please don't apologize for my father's behavior. He doesn't deserve the excuses! He has put me into a world of hurt and I'm really just tired of it. I still refuse to talk to him now, but I figured out that if I just forgive him within my heart I will find happiness. He has put way too much pain within the constraints of my heart and it will happen no longer. Anyway, thank you all for reading my poem! I feel special! hehe. and all of you are very special to my heart. I wish you all the best in happiness, and even in forgiveness... ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
I kinda liked the cynical little twist on the end of the poem...it reminds me of my own bitterness in certain areas of my life. I don't think there is a better way to release the demons than through poetry...good poem "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You show so much anger towards your dad. I've never seen so much anger towards their dad but from myself. i've forgiven him and moved on, and you should do the same thing. No matter what, he still is your dad. Be better than him, and on eway to start is by forgiving him. Treat him really nice even though he doesn't return the favor. This way your conscience is clean. I really love your poems. Everytime i see your name posting one, i make sure i read it.  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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