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Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

0 posted 2000-07-02 11:58 AM


My Friend

She was standing there,
Under that sky,
Picking up some flowers,
Her body
Like sheer satin
Floating through the wild flowers;
In a perfect cloud
She looked at the sky
She danced forward
High on her tip toes;
Behind the tree
Through weeds, flowers,
Over stones,
To the water spot,
She tip toed
Like a flower
Like a seed
Like a perfect friend


"True friends stab you in the front"

© Copyright 2000 Michelle Y. Plocinik - All Rights Reserved
StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
1 posted 2000-07-02 12:06 PM


You have a wonderful essence of writing! something that I strive for! Keep it up, you're doing great! I'm glad that you have such a great friend! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
2 posted 2000-07-02 02:44 PM


very well written i like this one very much and hope to see more from you soon bravo bravo.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
3 posted 2000-07-02 10:38 PM


there was a very dreamy, mystical quality to this poem..I really liked it.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

4 posted 2000-07-02 10:46 PM


That was really good.  It had a nice flow and quality.  Keep it up!
Bel

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
5 posted 2007-12-01 06:53 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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