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Macy New Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 6USA |
"Breakdown" Each day The pain remains - Never ceasing to fade away The heartache stays with her Day after day Like a diamond in the sky, She used to shine But as clouds, her emotions cover the brightness Where once her personality radiated with a special glow As her head hangs low It painfully falls into her trembling hands Soaked with sadness Her eyes release silent tears She weeps, Hardly able to breathe Like rain drops, her tears are unable to stop One by one They so carelessly drop Her petite body quivers Uncontrollably So cold and so alone Her world crumbles As she tries to get up But stumbles A broken heart shatters to pieces As her lifeless body crashes to the floor Her world so dark Her life falling apart She grimaces at the images... Her memory plays like a movie, Back to the first day they met Him: As handsome as can be She: As pretty as a doll. Wonders if it is her turn to fall in love... Their first date Their first kiss Their last day To that last embrace - After all the heartache All the tears After all the pain She searches for what remains A soul within She dare finds There all along Time after time With courage, she manages to open her weary, yet beautiful blue eyes From this moment on Her life has changed The future is hers Each day She will not only strive to live the length of her life... She will cherish the width She has survived She is, with great honor - alive. |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
It was very moving and I liked it very much. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
OMG!! I think this is the best poem I have ever read!! There is so much meaning to it! Your words were so captivating! Your phrases so intruiging! And eventhough it was sad deep within, it was still sooooo great!!! Please keep writing! you are very very talented!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
a wonderful piece i love it each time i read it. so do keep it up and never stop what your heart writes so well. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I LOVE this poem! Whenever you are pushed to the ground, you have two choices. Either you dust yourself off and go on, or you don't. I'm glad your charactor (or you) decided to take the former choice. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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