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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2000-06-30 02:38 AM




See how deep you can go with this one.

The Unloved

The vibrant glowing around us all
projects our worth.
Demanding to be seen by all
who feel our enchantment.
Delivering love, truest in form
through care and compassion and truth
to any hearts with shades of blue
who know just who we are.
Who we are is simply what we do.
We befriend, we share, we sacrifice.
We are those less shared upon...
less sacrificed for.
But as the endless lives we touch
become more endless,
we've found bliss in ourselves
and eachother.
With that revalation discovered,
our love will go no longer...
unloved.

Jeremy D. Halstead 6/16/00


"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

© Copyright 2000 Jeremy D. Halstead - All Rights Reserved
Jacman
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since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
1 posted 2000-06-30 06:25 PM


Jeremy, I havn't read anything of yours that I didn't love.  This is truly exceptional, and I somehow feel like its all about me, or I'm about it, or something, or nothing, or all of it at the same time.  

jason

LoveBug
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Posts 4697

2 posted 2000-06-30 08:16 PM


This is a beautiful piece, my friend. I'm glad that you see the true value of love.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

3 posted 2000-06-30 08:17 PM


Jeremy- That was really good.  You should really keep up writing, becuase you're really good at it.  
Bel

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
4 posted 2000-07-01 02:50 AM


first of all you got my vote and i rather enjoyed the read glad you see the up side of things not everyone can do that.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
5 posted 2000-07-01 11:34 PM


Hey, that was very beautiful again.  Thanx for the email.  I actually felt like you were writing about me.  Can't wait to read more.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
6 posted 2000-07-02 11:20 AM


Jer~well, I told you I would get to it, it just took a little while and I hope you forgive me!! anyways, this poem is simply magnificent! I've never known a person such as you who had such a way with words! Please continue to amaze me with each and every word with each and every line with each and every stanza, and finally with each and every poem!! Keep it up my hubby~Love Always~*~JeSsIcA~*~

~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

TAP2
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
7 posted 2000-07-02 07:08 PM


Well, Jeremy, indeed we are unloved. As long as we continue to find joy in the love and appreciation of our poetic peers we will cease to be unloved. Great job!!!
TAP2

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
8 posted 2000-07-02 07:16 PM


JEREMY this is probably one of the best poems that i have read of yours...actually its probably one of my favorite...keep up the good work buddy...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

BabyGirl1
Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91
Morris, IL
9 posted 2000-07-02 11:22 PM


Great writing Jeremy!  It goes very deep. SOmetimes we are all the unloved.  So many times us poets are neglected and underwritten.  Our true worth is only seen through the eyes of those just like ourselves.  Yet, if we continue to find love and strength in each other, one day we will all be loved as we love.
Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
10 posted 2000-07-03 07:01 PM


This poem is great, your obviously very good at this.
Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
11 posted 2000-07-03 07:05 PM


This poem is great, your obviously very good at this.
**AANGELLE**
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 45

12 posted 2000-07-04 06:57 PM


This was a fabulous poem which I really enjoyed and I love a lot of your poetry.  Keep up the great writing and remember that we all love you and your poems here in Passions!!!  
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
13 posted 2000-07-05 05:35 AM


Exceptional Jeremy ... you dug deep for this, and it comes through beautifully! Wonderful writing and sentiments!  Well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

buttercup411
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since 2000-07-03
Posts 41
miami, fl, u.s
14 posted 2000-07-05 09:37 AM


this poem has such beauty in it...... and it's a great piece, love the way you put words together
SweetPoet17
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 108

15 posted 2000-08-04 06:12 AM


BEAUTIFUL
Kittie
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since 2000-07-08
Posts 103

16 posted 2000-08-04 02:04 PM


Not many words can be used to describe what a wonderful poem this is.
Kittie



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