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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
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~Chicago~

0 posted 2000-06-29 05:56 PM


~*~All About You~*~


You say things,
that I know you dont mean.
Its just the way,
you want yourself to be seen.

You do things,
that you dont want to do.
And I know that,
you know this is all true.

You put on an act,
like you really dont care.
But its just feelings,
that you dont want to share.

Why do you let people,
treat you like your dirt?
Cause the way I see it,
you are being hurt.

You need to move on,
and make some new friends.
But maybe this time,
they wont hurt you in the end.


~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

© Copyright 2000 Erin Erbs - All Rights Reserved
amazon_lover
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
1 posted 2000-06-29 06:39 PM


Hi Erin
Good message..sometimes people act out of some desparate need....a need to hold something thats out of reach or may be to feel complete...well said make new friends and move on.....

Sincerely
A_L

Snickers
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since 2000-05-25
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT
2 posted 2000-06-29 07:03 PM


Erin,
  This is very good!! I especially like the theme of it, very well expressed.  Good job.  I think I know how u feel.  A good friend of mine has been hanging out with the "wrong" ppl.  And she's totally oblivious to the fact that they don't really care about her, they just use ppl.  I guess if the person won't listen to you, there isn't anything u can do.  But you are an excellent friend for caring so much to write this poem.  I like your work.

~<3 Alwayz~
  **Nikki**


~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~

Jacman
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since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
3 posted 2000-06-30 02:46 PM


Nothing is more frustrating than watching a good friend, and someone you love getting hurt.  I don't know if your like me, but when my friends are hurting, I'm hurting.  This is a very well put, and needfull poem.  I hope your friend takes your advice.

jason

Nikkisweet
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 183
Tx, Dallas
4 posted 2000-06-30 08:25 PM


This was a really good poem.  Sometimes I feel like that though,I've been hurt twice and I can't stand it anymore so i just open up and then I don't get hurt.  
Nice poem.

Within you I lose myself.
Without you I find myself wanting to become lost again.
-unkown-

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

5 posted 2000-06-30 08:29 PM


That was good, but I think I can relate more to the person you were writing about.  I hope they take your advice, I've been there and know how they must feel.  Good luck to you both
Bel

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
6 posted 2000-06-30 09:12 PM


Erin~I know your feelings all too well! You seem to care very much though and I think your friend just needs to realize it! Keep your head up and maybe tell your friend how you feel! I think they are just a little oblivious to the fact that they are getting taken advantage of because they are on the inside looking out. You are on the outside looking in and you are able to see more sides to the story than your friend! Best of Luck to you both! I hop everything works out!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
7 posted 2000-07-01 02:59 AM


i feel you should have summited this one i really enjoyed this read and wish to read a lot more like this real soon so keep them coming and it gives a great message to all of us thanks for posting it.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Acies
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8 posted 2000-09-24 03:41 PM


great write -- missed it again.  The new members should read this too.  This poem has a good meaning to it

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
9 posted 2000-09-24 03:53 PM


Wow Acire...You like digging up old poems!!!Thanks for bringing this one back up!!!Im glad that you liked it!!!

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

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