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A Mistake You Made |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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~A Mistake You Made~ The day you left me, my life changed. And you are the on I have always blamed. You say that you love me and you act like you care. But, now Mom, I realized that you never were there. How could you let it happen the way that it did? How could you get up and leave and abandon your kid? I will never forget the day you left me. It is something that has been a bother, you see. The love I thought I had for you will never be real. And thats why its so hard for me to tell you how I feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
oooooohhhhhh this feeling must be sad for you as well. i have a question did my poem like this inspire this one from you? and if your still awake and read this please email me i just need someone to talk to right now. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
A mom abandoning her kid is really pathetic..be strong kid.. Sincrely A_L |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
amazon...its not that my mom abandoned us...it just seemed like a good word to put in the poem...her and my dad got a divorce...she walked out of our lives 4 years ago...we had a choice who we wanted to live with...when me and my sister chose my dad that was it...she couldnt deal with it...we didnt want to leave our friends and our home...she wanted us to just pack up and leave our lives...to change and be someone else...live in a new part of the city...just change our lifestyle...and we werent gonna do that...so she didnt really abandon us...she left...so thats the story if you really want to know...Jeremiah...i emailed you but you never answered...and yes i got it from your poem...but hey i didnt copy...haha ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I'm so sorry that your mom left you like that. It must be very hard, but you seem to be a strong person. Just keep your head up, and you'll get through it. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
I liked your poem. It's sad, but expresses exactly how you feel. Like they say, what doesn't kill you, makes you stronger. Great poem. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
Erin, This must be a senstive topic for you to write about. But I hope that by putting your feelings into words it helped you a bit. I know when I write poetry it usually makes me feel better afterwards. Anyway, I'm very sorry that you had to go through such a situation. I can relate to you on some terms b/c my father left my mother when she was pregnant with me. Although I never knew him many questions arise in my head, ya know what I mean? Great poem, though, and I think you should give it to your mom. Hang in there hun. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I really like the way you ended this poem. The title is pretty catchy too. Has yer mom read this... maybe she should "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
wow Erin. a very powerful poem. this really eclipses any feuds I have in my family. your words are very powerful. I'm glad that I had the chance to read this poem, as late as I may be. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jose~~~i thought i was going crazy when i got an e-mail saying a post to this poem...not remembering if it was something i just posted not to long ago...buddy i posted this poem almost 2 months ago and you go and dig it up...but im glad you did...and im glad you replied...i mean better late then never right???thanks for the reply... ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Erin, Hey there. I can't tell you how much this poem touched me. I really can't express my feelings as well as you. I can express me feelings, but it doesn't always seem to come out the way I expect. Well if you want to know what I am talking about just email me. I am glad that you posted this even if you wrote it a long time ago. Anyway, keep your head up. It will get better. Take care and God bless. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
chel~~~thank you for the reply...i really appreciate it...even if the poem was posted a long time ago...someone must have liked it to bring it back... ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I regret that I wasn't here when this poem was still posted. This site has really come alive for me in a whole new way ever since I found out how to dig up these precious poems of long ago. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
ok i understand what you are saying...but thank you for reading it... ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I can't believe i missed this too!!! Heartfelt poem Erin...very touching. I'm so sorry for what happened, hope everything is fine now. I'll never miss your poems again. ps. If you're wondering why I'm reading your old poems, I think I'll do it with everyone too cause I believe that the newer members are missing something when they don't get to read em.  As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Acire~~~This was probably the most emotional poem that I wrote...Not really emotional...I dont know what to call it right now...I was just going through some tough times with my mom...But things are better now... Thank you for bringing my poems up...Im glad that you are reading them... *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that is sooo sad. And it really made me think of my best friend, who has kinda been going thru the same thing. Her mom abandoned her when she was a young child, and her father was arrested a couple of years later. Her siblings and her were even living off the street for about a month, before her aunts/uncles adotped them. And even now she still gets those feelings that no body cares. Well sorry for rambling, but that really got me thinking. Great poem i really liked it! Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow. yeah, I didn't expect it to be about your mother. For some reason I was thinking "Boyfriend". But it worked. Loved the last 2 lines! -Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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~*Meghan*~ Junior Member
since 2000-05-22
Posts 17 |
I went into this poem, thinking it were about a breakup or something. But this blew my mind. And this poem makes me think about everything that I have. And I am thankful that I have my mom, and thank God everyday. And I'm sorry about what happend, and don't know how you live, and I know I couldn't deal with it, the way you already did! Best Wishes & With Love ~*Meghan*~ |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
this is awesome. but it's so sad. well, bye. keep writin'/ i love this. Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Sweetstuff~~~This world sucks...Thats why we go through with what we do...My mom didnt abandon us...She left but it felt as if she abandoned us...Life is getting better though...I have moved on...And am happy to say that I am happy now... Jenn~~~I wish this was about a boyfriend but its not...My boyfriend has been there for me when the times get hard...And I thank god I have him cause I dont know what I would do without him... Meghan~~~Its not that I dont have anything without her...I have my dad who has been there for me when she wasnt...And Im glad that I have him there for me...Its not that hard without her... Allysa~~~I know its sad...Just think I have to live with it too...But oh well...No one ever said that life was gonna be fun and easy... Thank you all for the replies...I really appreciate them... *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Glad Jose dug this one up. Very meaningful and heartfelt. Enjoyed it very much. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
I guess I didn't see this one, unfortunately. It's really good, and I'd like to say something else, but I can't really think of much to tell you. So keep writing ok? hasta luego Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Im glad he dug it up too!!!Thanks for the replies Thomas & Isabel!!! It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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