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~Night_Mist~ Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 31Calgary, AB Canada |
Shallow I can resist you, you don't mean that much to me, You mean more. You take me too seriously, you need to stop trying so hard. And give in. If you broke us, you'd break me, And you. I'm too there, Too real. You're accustomed to fake, it's all you've dealt with. What you're dealing with. I beat you at your own game, you feel normal, Shared. I'm a disappointement. I'm what everyone thought I was. Except you. You knew different, but hoped I'd prove you wrong. I didn't. You led me on, and felt guilty. You should. I had it all once, before you came. It's irreplaceable. I've hurt you so much that you can't see past it. You've stopped looking through me, You look right at me now. I made you second-guess me, And yourself. You won't admit it. You just accept it and move on, to the easier, To the shallow end. You move on to people that are your mask, And that won't try and see past it. I am too far in, too deep. You gave up on me, I was too good , yet not good enough. Like your real self, The one you hate. |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
this is a really good poem...full of feeling and expression...i liked the end where you said "Like your real self, The one you hate." to me it just makes the poem more powerful..i look forward to reading more of your work...keep writing! Luv ya, Danielle  "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
yes i do agree with the last line and the expression. must guys/girls have to be this way that i find is what messes up things. good read waiting to read more. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi NM I have been through with these feelings with my ex-GF. Seeing thro someone is really difficult and you get tired of it after sometime. Its funny how people act unpredictably to utter dismay of their lovers. Hope you're not one of them. Anyway I am through with that pphase of life which was very pathetic... Sincerely\ A_L |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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