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The one i can't forget
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The one i can't forget |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
Cloths of a demon afire... Hands fit for a goddess second to only Aphrodite herself. Hair of the sea of tranquility. Brown and Blond. Stands tall and proud willingly over excited. High on all essences of life. Skin soft as a bedtime pillow So for now goodnight. As i awake with her eye's as my morning light. Bright. Being with her is the only thing i thought to be truely right... to a girl i'll never forget cause she hurt me more then she'll ever know. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
That is such a beautiful poem. I love it. You seem like a sweet guy I'm sorry that you had to go through the pain of a broken heart, I definately know how that feels. Hopefully things only get better for you. Keep writing Luv ya, Danielle  "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Hey man, this is a wonderfully crafted piece of work. You really seemed to show complete comfort in her, whoever she was. Sorry you had to go through the pain, but without it we would not know we were alive. And allways remember this, "time is the master physician that can heal all the wounds of a broken heart. jacman |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I can relate to this extremely well, my friend. I hope that you find someone who sees all of your worth and talent soon. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
you have such wonderful talent!! I'm very sorry for your loss...the power one has over another is amazing, and often painful. -if you don't like the message, don't kill the messenger.- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
JEREMIAH you were just suffering one of lifes fu**ed up consequences...dont live in the past just dont forget about it...you know that if you ever need anything i am here to listen to you...i respect you alot just from reading your poems...and just from you responding to mine...doesnt it suck though when its like you have soo much love for someone...then they tear your heart out of your chest and stomp on it... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
Hey, this was really good. Whoever that girl was, was really lucky to be with you. Wish all guys were as sensitive and sweet as you are. I'm really enjoying you're poetry. Sometimes suffering is what it takes to write good poetry. |
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LIL.MAMA Junior Member
since 2000-06-26
Posts 32 |
HEY THAT WAS REALLY GOOD I WISH MY EX HAD THE NERVE TO EVER WRITE SOMETHING LIKE THAT TO ME KEEP THEM COMING |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Sorry for your loss, but don't live your life in regrets. "Sorry sounds so much like sorrow." "Lost somewhere in yesterday's sorrows, comes unhealthy aching for tomorrows. Really when we lost our way, Was when we lost sight of today." ~Kay< !signature--> "I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel." ~Touch and Go [This message has been edited by AniKay83 (edited 06-29-2000).] |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Something that doesn't kill you, only makes you stronger! Fantastic poems, I have read alot of your poems, and you have an exceptional talent. Keep the shining side on top, and keep up all the good stuff. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Thank you for writing this poem, I'd vote for it but I don't know how...let me know and I will. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
if you have read my poetry, I think you know that I can relate to this poem....very beautifully sad. I like the impact of the last line especially. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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