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Jacman
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since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US

0 posted 2000-06-27 07:49 PM


You bring me to a place;
a place where noting seems real.
Enticing a part of me
that no one else could steal.
I look to the past,
it seems no longer to exist.
And the future I cannot see,
but I find joy and peace.
I just want you here with me.
Right now we are togethor
Right now the world is gone.
All of my cares, melt into you.
You are my time and place.

© Copyright 2000 Jason Allen Carmen - All Rights Reserved
Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
1 posted 2000-06-28 01:43 AM


Hey Jay, I've already read this poem, so you know how much I like it.  It's great that yer in the forum now.  I hope ya keep active in it....it's very rewarding...talk at ya later man.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
2 posted 2000-06-28 02:12 AM


welcome to the teen. loved this piece from you and hope to read more real soon.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
3 posted 2000-06-28 03:45 PM


WOW~Jason, this is a wonderful poem! You also seem to have an endearing relatiponship with words! I'm not really sure what else to say.. and I'm not a shy person either. lol. anyways, I hope you enjoy your stay here, Passions is a wonderful place to post and I hope you enjoy it as much as I do. I will be looking for more of your work! Nice writing! Keep it up. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

Misty Blue
Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44

4 posted 2000-06-29 02:23 PM


Hi
I'm a new member also and I felt your poem so much.You have a gift just like everyone else here has.I hope you continue to excel in whatever you do.

TearsOfPearls
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa
5 posted 2000-06-29 04:10 PM


This is a great poem, with a great feeling.

Keep on writing.

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

LoveBug
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Posts 4697

6 posted 2000-06-29 04:37 PM


This is a beautiful poem, my friend. It's wonderful to find love such as this. Never let it go.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Snickers
Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT
7 posted 2000-06-29 07:06 PM


Welcome to Passions!! With a first post like this, you have definetly announced your prescence!  Great job, you use your words very well.  Can't wait to see more from u!  

~<3 Alwayz~
  **Nikki**


~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~

TAP2
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
8 posted 2000-06-29 09:29 PM


Jacman,
Nice to see some of your stuff out in the open. Keep it up!
TAP2

Jacman
Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
9 posted 2000-06-29 10:18 PM


Thank you all very much for such a warm welcome.  I will do my best to return the favor to all of you.  Time restraints keep me from really doing all that I want to do in here, but I'll do my best.  Again thank you.
Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
10 posted 2000-07-01 03:10 AM


Jacman, it is a pleasure to read your first post! Welcome to the family. I really like this. Please check your email for a special welcome!  
April Resi
Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119
Alabama
11 posted 2000-07-08 12:46 PM


This was so beautiful.  It's wonderful to feel the things you just managed to put into words so well. I just wanted you to know that I think you are wonderful writer and I look forward to hearing from you more. You've got my vote.
April

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
12 posted 2000-07-08 12:10 PM


Beautiful first post Jacman!  To live for the moment ... no yesterday, no tomorrow ... wonderful!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
13 posted 2007-12-01 10:43 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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