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heatherbear
Junior Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 48


0 posted 2000-06-25 09:31 PM


Sometimes in life you're hurting,
and other times you're not.
Sometimes in life you need a friend,
a friend that means a lot.

In order to be that special friend,
you have to pass a test.
Don't study just work hard,
like a birdy leaving it's nest.

This test involves your courage,
Your dignity and your trust.
Don't worry about failing,
you'll pass this test you must.

You always take this test,
until you're finally done.
Then you become that special friend,
and you're the only one.

This is a real important job,
and it is very tough.
You must not ever give up,
even when you've had enough.

I never found this special friend,
although I thought so many times.
We got so very close,
then stopped talking, just like mimes.

Please listen very close,
and do not hurt me anymore.
This friendship things so special,
don't treat me like a door.

I have feelings too , you know,
and I hate it when they're hurt.
I'm sick of being treated,
like old, disguisting dirt.

So goodbye my special friend,
you never passed the test.
You are still just like a birdy,
afraid to leave it's nest.

© Copyright 2000 heatherbear - All Rights Reserved
Vball Chickie1624
Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116
New York
1 posted 2000-06-25 09:46 PM


This poem is awesome.  I love it.  I love how you compared it to the bird...and I just love the whole meaning behind the poem!  Keep writing!!

Luv ya,
Danielle  

"Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do."

"The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say."
- Anais Nin

"Follow your own heart, not others."



Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
2 posted 2000-06-26 12:38 PM


oh yes i do love it to. i feel that you should summit it for the book. well anyway great work this is the test and my bestfriend john have both passed. love your work so i'll keep reading it.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-06-26 01:30 AM


damn...this poem is soo BEAUTIFUL...i really think that you should submit it for the book too...this is one of the many best poems that i have ever read...i give you props for this poem...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Snickers
Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT
4 posted 2000-06-26 10:51 AM


This is excellent!!  I'm sorry that you had to go through a false friendship.  Sometimes ppl don't pass the test, and other times they cheat on it.  But either way, in the end you're usually hurt.  At least you realized that you deserve better friends than that, and you do.  With your permission, I'd like to give this poem to a "friend" (she really doesn't deserve that title) of mine.  Great work!

~<3 Alwayz~
**Nikki**


~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~

LoveBug
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Posts 4697

5 posted 2000-06-26 01:07 PM


This is a wonderful poem, my friend. I'm sorry that you had to go through this, but remember that Passions is "A Family of Friends!"   We'll always be here for you.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

heatherbear
Junior Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 48

6 posted 2000-06-26 02:16 PM


Thank You everyone for you're wonderful replies.  Snickers, you have my permission to give it to your friend.  Maybe she'll get the clue and make a change for the better.  Everyone keep up the good work!!

                            ~~Heather Bear~~

~Night_Mist~
Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 31
Calgary, AB Canada
7 posted 2000-06-26 04:33 PM


Hey Heatherbear:
    I loved your poem. It's very true! Good luck and keep writing! ~Night_Mist~


~Night_Mist~
Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 31
Calgary, AB Canada
8 posted 2000-06-26 04:33 PM


Hey Heatherbear:
    I loved your poem. It's very true! Good luck and keep writing! ~Night_Mist~


~Night_Mist~
Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 31
Calgary, AB Canada
9 posted 2000-06-26 04:33 PM


Hey Heatherbear:
    I loved your poem. It's very true! Good luck and keep writing! ~Night_Mist~


Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
10 posted 2007-11-18 03:30 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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