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~Night_Mist~
Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 31
Calgary, AB Canada

0 posted 2000-06-24 05:12 PM


Land Of The Diminishing Dreams

The fury pours out,
Like a stream to the ocean.
Uncontrolable anger.
Hate.
I turn my back on the world,
For the world has turned it's back on me.
It soars like an eagle,
Spreading it's evil.
Taking the Beauty,
Stealing the sun.
Covering our world,
With dark, black,
Unhappy clouds.
Rage.
No more smiles,
No more tears.
What have we brought,
Upon ourselves?
The love,
Who took it from us?
Our dreams,
What have they become?
Sweet innocence.
How did it disappear?
We spend our days in,
Darkness.
The end,
To social life.
No more laughs,
No more conversations.
Fear.
Do we have,
A Future?



© Copyright 2000 Annie - All Rights Reserved
MysticalAngel
Junior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 23

1 posted 2000-06-24 05:27 PM


Night_Mist.. Thank you for your reply on my poem.. but quite honestly I am not that unhappy. I have wonderful parents that take care of me until I am 18 and then maybe me and my mom can have contact. If she's straightened her life out. You seem to be filled with lots of hurt and pain. And believe me I have had my share of counseling because I have gone thru the same thing. But in all honesty... it's more fun to be happy and make the best of things while you still have them. I don't have a relationship with my mom and I now wish that I could have had one when I was able to live with her and us not fight. But I have thrown that chance away and I do regret it. I don't know the seriousness of your family problems. But I am here to listen any time you need anyone to talk to. Sometimes it helps. Plus, I kinda know where your coming from. Feel Free to email me anytime... Carissa02@hotmail.com And your poem was really beautiful. Keep up the writing.. believe me.. it helps.. sorry about the book! MysticalAngel

** If something is too good to be true... 9 times out of 10 it is **

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
2 posted 2000-06-24 06:18 PM


NM~ Lovely poem~There seems to be a lot of negativity within. I hope this isn't your way of thinkg all the time. Think about the good things that happen also! Keep your chin up...Things will work out. Best of Luck - Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
3 posted 2000-06-24 06:26 PM


p.s. Welcome to Passions!!! Hope you enjoy your stay here!  

~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697

4 posted 2000-06-25 12:00 PM


Welcome to Passions.

Everything you say is true, except the part where you ask "Do we have a future". We DO have a future, my friend. That is the only hope we have, to create a better world in the future. But it starts with you. Good writing.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
5 posted 2000-06-25 01:39 AM


yes yes welcome to passions. i really enjoy reading your work. from what i have read you seem to be my type of person like as you hate life and the world and wish so much you could make it better. i would love to become friends with you so email me if you would like to be friends and talk and maybe join the Lost Soul's hehehehe. and if not o'well i tried.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Lani_DarkOne
Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152
UK
6 posted 2000-06-25 09:56 AM


Hey Night Mist!!
Welcome to Passions. First of all I love your name.
Your poem is what everyone feels when the world has turned it's back on them...but you put it very well with so much emotion that really relates to how I feel(most of the time).
And the last line...good question that I sometimes think ot myself "Do i have a future?" The future is like this deep hazy fog, gardually clearing away with every day that passes, but never leaving.

Sorry for rambling!!Great poem!!Keep writing!


"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

Deranger
Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
7 posted 2000-06-26 12:28 PM


Land of The Diminishing Dreams a accurate title indeed...It does often seems that life is full of nothing more than broken hearts and shattered dreams.  Seeming is not being, however.  There is no point to live your life in the shadows of grief, life has so much to offer.  Damnit, life is yours, live it your way.    
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
8 posted 2007-11-18 02:01 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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