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hoppy
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since 2000-01-27

Posts 271

0 posted 2000-06-23 11:38 PM

With this one as well as Hidden i was on a little bit of a metephorical kick. It sorta works pretty good. I like this poem because it sorta resembles Robert Frost's works. Not that i'm close to that good but it's the same concept. So without rambling, here is In The Field

Late in the night, there he was,
Existing by himself, just because.
He sat for dinner, neith clouds fallen low;
Watching for the day, waiting for the crow;
Night faded quickly, pleading for the deed,
Taking its home, showing its greed.
As light broke open the day
He heard the sound, then wished it away
But the time has come, the daunting hour here,
Great gusts of air, the blade draws near.
Standing alone, his bravery none could surpass;
Tis a mournful day-there falls another blade of grass

---Written by:Hoppy
5-25-00

There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line.
-- Oscar Levant

"Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live."

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

1 posted 2000-06-24 12:49 PM

oh i love this piece of your work. its great i love the irony and imagery you use good job keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

Christopher J
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 94

2 posted 2000-06-24 12:51 PM

A very touching poem..thank you for your genius work ...again!

ESP
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since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

3 posted 2000-06-25 05:50 AM

This is great, Hoppy!!! You have a great way with words.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2000-06-25 08:03 AM

This is a really good poem Hoppy. You should be really proud of it. More poetry like this and you could be robert frosts cousin

Great use of words and imagery.

Very good.

~AF~

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry

Lani_DarkOne
Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 152
UK

5 posted 2000-06-25 10:34 AM

This is excellent!! I love the images you conjure with your words, and the twist at the end!!
Keep posting

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2007-11-18 01:59 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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