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a repost - just want girls to know how guys feel |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
As I think of you and close my eyes Someone please hold me tight Tell me that I'm just dreaming Because it hurts me deep inside I'd like you to feel how I miss you so much How I miss your warm, caring, and gentle touch Your cute little face in my mind Your soft and innocent lips touching mine I miss running my fingers thru your hair The feeling in my heart knowing you did care I miss the limited times we spent with each other How I wanted it to last and be with you forever That sharp but mysterious look in your eyes You look so cute when you bite your lower lip as you smile That devilish grin that shows as you stare right at me I miss you so much, alone in the dark, feeling so lonely You're the only one I've always wanted A fool, I am, I took you for granted Now here I am, holding on to the memories Left only with hope slowly drowning in my own tears Now I realize how much you really mean to me I miss you so much, that I want you to see Why only now, I don't know, I must have been blind My broken heart is in your hands, please be kind All I can say is "I'm sorry, please forgive me" It may not be enough, but I don't know what else to do I'm not asking you for one last chance Baby, all I want you to know is that "I LOVE YOU" |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great job. i like the last few lines where you state that your not asking for another chance but you still state that you still love him/her. keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well this is a very nice poem...but how do you think us girls feel when we get our heart broken????we feel just like you do in your poem...it was beautiful though!!!! ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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MysticalAngel Junior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 23 |
That was a very beautiful poem! I know exactly how you feel... and from what I read.. I think we are both in the same kind of situation. I broke up with my boyfriend and put him through hell... now I regret it and I want him back in my life. I love him more than any poem or song could ever tell him! Good luck in your relationships... and good poem. I loved it! MysticalAngel |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
I love the poem. It explains exactly how you feel...it's awesome..keep writing!! Luv ya, Danielle "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." "The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin "Follow your own heart, not others." |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I'm sorry you're hurting sweetheart..I guess it's the way life goes but I had to say that life really feels like it bottoms out at times and then oneday the sun will shine and you'll feel it...may take years but it will happen and you know why? Cause it's hard to keep a memory alive when it's gone... Good writing sweetheart. HUGS |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Hey swewtie, well, why I never got around to replying to this is beyond me. I know I read it, just didn't reply for some unapparent reason. at any cost this poem touched my little heart!! You have such a way with words and I'm glad to know some guys care. I fell in love with this poem the second I read it and my only question to you is, do you mind if I print it out?!!? keep up the wonderful work. Let's see some more!!!! talk at ya later!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey there, I am sorry to hear about this girl. Just keep your head up. Hope to read more. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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Kittie Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103 |
Aww, this is so sweet and very touching even on such a sad topic. Good luck with everyone, and great job on the poem. Kittie |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Acire! This is so beatuifully expressed! Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
That definately was a wonderful poem, there were so many emotions in there that I didn't know what to do. I hope that you can find someone that will make you stop feeling that way. I hope that you can one day be happy without her. Love Always, Shell. |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
I think that this is the first that I have really read of yours. I really enjoyed this poem. You did a wonderfull job expressing your sorrow and pain. I hope that she comes back to you. If you havn't already, show her the poem. That is if this is a current situation. Well later. jason  |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
This was a wonderful poem. It described such wanting and needing of a loved one. It does not matter if you are a guy or a girl. we all have feelings at at times, we all feel like your words in this poem. "We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other." -Luciano de Crescenzo- |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Thanks to all of you for your wonderful replies. I'm sorry I haven't had the chance to thank you till today. And Jessica, yes, go ahead and print it. I don't mind  Thanks to all again |
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Lurdburger Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 39Carlisle, Cumbria, England |
Beautiful stuff. I tried to say everything your poem says to my ex-girlfriend when we split up, but all that came out was kinda "burble...um, yeah....see ya then..." |
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GodsPerfktAngel Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 28Ohio |
Great work there!!! Thats exactly what I want my ex boyfrind to say to me..... |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Beautiful poem...but it's true we go through this and more cause we're so damn senitive! Try giving her that poem...maybe she'll understand. Great post anyhow and thanks for sharing! Salooma |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
aaaaawww i know what you mean, that really got me. what i wouldn't give just to know a certain someone felt that way about me, cuz i really miss him...bad. Well great poem!! Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~¤*¤~iF yOu LuV sOmEoNe, PuT ThEiR nAmE iN a CiRcLe, iNsTeAd Of A hEaRt, BcUz HeArTz CaN bReAk, BuT CiRcLeZ gO oN 4eVeR~¤*¤~ |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
What an excellent poem, that was beautiful. -jessica- |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Your poem was so beautiful I really understood it based on my own experiences.Keep up the awsome work I can't wait to read your next poem. Lauren |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
acire, Firstly I am sorry if I hurt your feelings in any way with my remarks in the other thread.... I hope you will forgive me... Now to your poem... This poem has an excellent emotional tone to it and a tremendous flow also... all in all a great write... I am glad I could read it... My regards, sudhir |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I guess I can only say that i agree with Sudhir, it's wonderful. And a change of pace from all the posts of guys being evil  (just kidding everyone)[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 08-10-2000).] |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
ha ha..cute Lakewalker...great poem Acire! stay cool  Lavada "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
i don't know how i missed this one wow.... i know how it feels to miss someone, it's good to see there are guys out there who care as much as girls great work.... i wish my ex felt like you do "In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On" ~Robert Frost |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
oh Wow~ I got to this one a little late. But it was soo good. Almost made me cry. And i know that girls tend to think that guys don't have feelings because we get hurt so much. But its nice to know that guys think like us too. Keep writing because i really loved this.. ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Every now and then I read a poem and say to myself "Hey...I'm glad I read that poem". This happens to be one of those. Very interesting and effective idea. The clearity of your thoughts and expression of your emotions were great. keep it up. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Le Capitan de L'Amour Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60 |
dam man thats a really great poem you reflect all your feelings pretty well i hope you keep writting this is really great stuff but dont worry another girl will touch your heart and dont spill it all out because if you do you will suffer,nice poem keep writing impresive! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I understand you are hurting... Nice poem, and it's good to know that guys care. Keep writing. Jenn |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
hey ther enice poem!!! im sorry that io havent replied earlier!! i havent had much time!! thi is a wonderful poem!! i hope that all your dream can be filled with laughter and love by this certain guy!! if you keep your head up and tell him your true feelings he may come running back... trust me i know!! im with the guy that i kinda went through the same situation with!!! and im happier than ever!! so keep your head up high and keep up the good work hunny!!! k? see your poems around i hope!! love Janette p.s. i know this may seem kinda weird but if you ever need n e one to talk to im here!! my e mail adress is.... princessnetta55@ AOL.COM... K email me some time!! Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care! |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Thank you all for your kind responses to this poem. I'm pretty shocked with the replies cause the first time I posted this, I had like 2 replies. Thanks again to everyone |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
Hey great poem it made me realize that what we have should never be taken for granted. keep up the great work |
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MoonPrincess Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 29Wisconsin, USA |
Hey, acire, I really like this poem.... Not only does it describe how some guys feel when they break up with someone, but how us girls feel, too... I'm glad to have read this and realize that not all guys are slimeballs, but just most of them... J/K!!! Good job, and i hope to see more from you... Love, Kristi "Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear." |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
you all have made me feel better with all your replies --- again thank you so much As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
wow kid! seems like everytime I turn around, this one keeps finding it's way to the top!! I'll help out...*bump*... looks like you're very admired here!! You've beat my record of replies!! Keep it up!! and remember to keep your head up ok? LOVE YA BUNCHES!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Why is it that love always starts with a HuG grows with a kIsS and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~ |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
Wounderful poem and I think you did a great job. Keep up the great work!!!! I'm hopeing to read more of your work. Lovely_Kris |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
hey i really liked this poem, and it's really sad to know that you guys didn't get back together! but i still think that if i would have read that i would be crying and take u back, unless you did something so stupid that i couldn't forgive you. but i don't think that was the case so i'm sorry that she didn't take you back. i loved the poem and i thought that it was really sweet the way you just poured out ur emotions like that.Curlz "I've kissed the moon a million times, danced with angels in the sky" Enrique Iglesias |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Acire~~~This one has been like a see~saw...Going to the top of the list then back down...You know what I mean...Everyone must really like this one...I know I did...  It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
curlygurly --- if you wanna really know what she said about this poem, i'll tell ya. I read her the poem and she said, "oh" that's all she said erin --- thanks I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
just one thing to say: Loved it ~*~ Tamma ~*~ If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Okay, I think that's one of the sweetest poems I've ever read. It was great!! I loved it!!!! Too much talent...keep it up, good luck, keep smiling Bel |
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kutzly Junior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 17ohio |
hey that was a beautiful poem it touched me deeply and i hope to get to read more of them over time! and again that was awasome PLZ write more like that!! everyones seems to LOVE them later babe ME "when there was only one set of footprints it was when i caried you my son" |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Thanks all for liking my poem. Kutzly -- i've written other poems about the same person, and i don't think i'd be writing more in the future. wel,, i guess ishouldn't say never a millions thanks to you all. this really made me happy I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Fearless_Angel Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 57Calgary, AB Canada |
Hey Acire: That wasvery beautiful! It was the sweetest thing I've read in a long time... I wish I could write like that! Remember "Escape"? It's gonna be published ina book soon. They sent a letter asking meeh for permission to publish! I'm so excited! Anyways, thanks so much for the words of advice! I'll keep it in mind ok? Thanks again and I look forward to hearing from you again soon!!! Lotsa Love, Angel |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
*bumping* because this is one of the most beautiful poems ive ever read ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
c'est tres bien! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
thanks sweets hey dopey, what does that mean? I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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poe_32 Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 179Winnipeg, MB, Canada |
c'est tres bien means that it was good. He was just saying that he thought it was good in french. I also think it was tres bien, it was a great poem. Keep up the bien work §¤poe¤§ Life isn't about holding grudges or starting fights life is meant to be enjoyed |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
as mary poppins would say this is a supercalifragilisticexpialadocious poem!!! LMAO!!! this is sooo pretty i am adding it to my collection WRITE MORE!!! ~*Justine*~ |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
acire: time for my analogy on life. Girls are heartbroken by guys, Guys are heartbroken by girls. Everyone eventually feels the same, so no one dwells on it, unless you're me. everyone will have their heartbroken, get stabbed in the back, and face a million and one problems, but at the end of the day, they'll always have that last call. The last person, the one they finally realised was right instead of the other one. (this is starting to relate to my life a lil so I'm gonna stop now) but you get the point. C-ya later! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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