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MysticalAngel Junior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 23 |
It was a normal school day The sun was shining bright I remember in every way What was to happen later that night I didn't know it at the time Though my life would never be the same The blame was said to be mine Her revenge was to play games The office worker came in With a sad look on her face She put the letter in my hand What was fixing to happen... I couldn't take Slowly with confusion I opened the note with a sigh What I read had to be an illusion I histerically began to cry At the top was my name And it stated as I read Things are no longer the same I am sorry Carissa... Your mother is dead Then they handed me another note That was specifically written to me As I read what was wrote A suiside note was what I was to see She told me it was because of me That things had to end She was tired of trying to be My dearest closet friend Living a life with me Is something that wouldn't work And now you have the key To your own pitty and hurt I am sorry I couldn't be strong I am sorry I wasn't perfect I know I did everything wrong My whole life with you was a reject So now you know the truth And how things were meant to be I truly didn't love you And I know you didn't love me I am sorry for ruining your life I am sorry for getting in the way Things will be fixed with this knife I am sorry is all I have to say Suddenly I woke from sleep Tears streaming down my face The dream I had was deep I thanked the Lord with grace I thought to myself Mom.. I may never know where your at But I truly love you And I know you love me too! |
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MysticalAngel Junior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 23 |
I just wanted everyone who reads my poem to understand it the way I wrote it. I just recently moved in with my adoptive parents because my mother is suisidal. When I left... it wasn't on good terms. I was really stressed out because I was afraid I would drive her to committ suiside. I had a dream that I did and during class I decided to put that dream into a poem. And here it is. It never really happened... It is all a dream. Thanks... any comments are appreciated. Carissa |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
This is extremely powerful and very poignant work, Carissa. I'm so sorry to hear about your situation and I do sincerely hope things get better soon. Welcome to Passions, you'll make a lovely addition to our family! Oh, and by the way, 'suicide' is the correct way to spell it, just so ya know.  *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
dearest Carissa~ many thoughts..not enough words. umm...I'm very sorry to hear of your situation!! I truly do hope things get better. Has your mother read this? Sucicide is a scary and very troublesome thing! Keep up the faith and talk to your mom. My heart is with you!!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
your story is sad and i only hope things get better for you. i know each of us here will help you along your way so keep writing from that open heart of yours. good work and great job. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
damn this is one of the BEST peoms that i have EVER read... it brought tears to my eyes...im glad that some of it was a dream...but the other part about your mother i am sorry...i lost my mother too...she left us...hopefully you two will make up and have good times together... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
I am so sorry that you have been put through this though the poem is very powerful. My mother isn't suicidal but it made me stop and think about the way I treat her sometimes. Good poem and welcome to passions. Love, Crystal Maybe God has us meet a few wrong people so that when we meet the right one we can truly appreciate the gift. |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
This is so powerful, I couldn't stop reading it. Your situation sounds grim...I'm sorry about your mother. It's good you put this into a poem, it'll help you alot and is a good way to express yourself. Again, your poem was GREAT and I look forward to reading more of your work...and welcome to Passions! |
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MysticalAngel Junior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 23 |
Thanks you guys... I was kinda paranoid about putting my poetry on here but I got good responses... and I thank all you guys for the support. StarPryncess17: No my mother and I don't speak. I haven't spoke or seen her since Sept. of 1999 You guys are great... Maybe I will post somemore of my poetry that isn't so depressing. I write alot of love poems too! Look forward to reading some of you all's poetry too! Again..Thanks.. Carissa |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Wow, I voted for this one, I almost was in tears myself by the end. Very powerful work, and I hope your situation gets better. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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~Night_Mist~ Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 31Calgary, AB Canada |
Dear Carissa: I loved your poem. It's exactly how I feel. Only, my suitation is the other way around. I have depression. I was in tears when I finished reading because it reminded so much of our family and how it has fallen apart slowly. Anyways, I hope things do get better for you! Good luck! ~Night_Mist~ |
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angeleyez9999 New Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 1 |
Hi~ Your poems is very good! and i'm sorry to hear i about what u are living with! but remember, it isn't always ur fault! my thoughts are with you! ~JW~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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