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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~

0 posted 2000-06-23 12:30 PM


~Chapter 1~

You have big brown eyes,
and freckles scattered across your face.
My heart is telling me,
that its in the right place.

Everything was good but things started to change,
if it didnt go your way.
Good~bye was the only word,
that I caould choke out and say.

You are now gone,
so I will call you my past.
One thing I didnt know,
was how my heart healed so fast.




~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

© Copyright 2000 Erin Erbs - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2000-06-23 01:48 AM


great work i'm going to read each chapter and than i'll replie more.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-06-23 03:27 AM


thanks for the comment i hope you like the other ones...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
3 posted 2000-06-23 04:21 AM


"You are now gone,
so I will call you my past.
One thing I didnt know,
was how my heart healed so fast."

Those last few lines give your poem such meaning!sounds like this was a hard time in your life....? Keep your chin up!! I'll read the others and reply to those too so it will all make sense to me. Lovely poem though. simple yet holds a deep meaning. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~


~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

Crystalina123
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since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

4 posted 2000-06-23 08:18 AM


Hmmm, interesting . . . on to chapter 2

Maybe God has us meet a few wrong people so that when we meet the right one we can truly appreciate the gift.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
5 posted 2007-11-18 01:53 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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